TPO3 : You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response.Your response will be judged onn the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically,

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TPO3 : You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response.Your response will be judged onn the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.

Submitted by AzinKm on Mon, 09/04/2017 - 12:59

The article states that the portrait is not belong to Rembrandt the famous painter and provides three reason of support. However, the professor explains that this work is originaly painted by Rembrandt, and has been altered in about one hundered years ago by another person. She refutes each of aurthur's reasons.
First, the reading claims that there is a misconseption of detail in woman's fur wearing that a servant could not possibly afford. The professor refues this point by saying that it wasn't Rembrandt detail overlooking .She states that, after painting analysis it is revealed that the fur colour is painted over the original painting.
Second, the article posits that as Rembrandt was adept in ligh and shadow technique, the painting was in contrast to his mastery. However, the professor says that the original coloring of the painting illustrate that Rembrandt profisseincy is conceal beneath the new colour of alteration. The second artist may wanted to add value to the original masterpiece.
Third, the reading announce that the examination of the back of the painting reveals that the board is consited of different wooden parts which glued together, which is not Rembrandt painting method. Professor opposes this point by explaining the glued parts were then added to the primary painting to add to its size and value.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
Integrated TOEFL Writing

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
...article states that the portrait is not belong to Rembrandt the famous painter and pro...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 181, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...sor refues this point by saying that it wasnt Rembrandt detail overlooking .She state...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...at it wasnt Rembrandt detail overlooking .She states that, after painting analysis...
^^
Line 2, column 217, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: She
... it wasnt Rembrandt detail overlooking .She states that, after painting analysis it...
^^^
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'concealed'.
Suggestion: concealed
...lustrate that Rembrandt profisseincy is conceal beneath the new colour of alteration. T...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, may, second, so, then, third, in contrast, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1124.0 1373.03311258 82% => OK
No of words: 217.0 270.72406181 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1797235023 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58725289661 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562211981567 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 330.3 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.245310653 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.4 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0178387428566 0.272083759551 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00716953572793 0.0996497079465 7% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00894196546121 0.0662205650399 14% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0114755018629 0.162205337803 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0114949967886 0.0443174109184 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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