TPO31 , integrated writing

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TPO31 , integrated writing

Both the essay and the speaker discuss whether a pattern of fine lines can serve as the evidence that Sinosauropteryx had feathers. The essay opposes the opinion that Sinosauropteryx had feathers. However, the speaker strongly argues the viewpoints from the essay.

Firstly, the essay indicates that the fine lines might be formed by the animal's body after the animal's death. However, the speaker indicates that other animals' body didn't decompose after their death. Moreover, their body even is well-preserved in volcanic ash. There was no way that the Sinosauropteryx are decomposed after their death. As a result, the first reason from the essay is not convincing.

Secondly, the essay interprets that the frills from dinosaurs might be wrongly recognized as the feathers. However, the lecture states that the chemical elements are different from frills and feathers. It is because that feathers usually contain proteins. This is to say that the second reason from the essay might go wrong.

Last but not least, the essay points out that there is no use for Sinosauropteryx to own feathers. Nevertheless, the lecture argues that feathers have other purposes aside from flight and keeping warm. For example, some birds display their colorful feathers. As a result, the feathers might also act as a display function for Sinosauropteryx.

To sum up, the lecture opposes the essay by arguing the decomposition of animals' body, proofing the exact chemical elements from feathers and explaining the other purpose for the feathers

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...be formed by the animals body after the animals death. However, the speaker indicates t...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...eaker indicates that other animals body didnt decompose after their death. Moreover, ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, for example, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1295.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 243.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.329218107 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83361947206 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 145.348785872 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477366255144 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 388.8 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5506259939 49.2860985944 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.1764705882 110.228320801 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2941176471 21.698381199 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252168602838 0.272083759551 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908470712016 0.0996497079465 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540067366974 0.0662205650399 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139883428784 0.162205337803 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563098811922 0.0443174109184 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.3589403974 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 53.8541721854 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.0289183223 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.04 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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