TPO33 carved stone balls
In the passage, the author simply claims that there are three theories which can explain the purpose and meaning of the carved stone balls. However, in the lecture, the professor finds that the passage is full of holes and provides evidence to oppose from all three aspects.
To begin with, in the passage, the author states that the carved stone balls were used as weapons in hunting and fighting. Nevertheless, in the lecture, the professor indicates that the balls would be signed of weapon use if they truly were used as weapons in that time. What' more, the surface of the balls were well preserved, so it is difficult to make judge that the balls were used as weapons.
The second aspect the author mentions in the passage is that the carved stone balls were used as part of a primitive system of weights and measures. Conversely, in the lecture, the professor makes the point that the balls were different in size. Besides, they were also made of different types of stone so that they were different in the density. In this way, it is not convincing to draw the conclusion that they were used of measuring.
Another evidence the professor adopts to refute the passage is social purpose. In the passage, the author claims that the elaborate caving stones suggest that they may mark social status. On the contrary, in the lecture, the professor thinks that some balls are extremely too simple to be the status of the wealth. What's more, in that time, people in high ranking usually were buried with their possession, but the balls were never found in tombs.
To sum up, the author may ignore some fundamental factors and conclusion should be seriously discussed again.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 228, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: different
...sor makes the point that the balls were different in size. Besides, they were also made of differ...
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Line 9, column 382, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'drawing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: drawing
...sity. In this way, it is not convincing to draw the conclusion that they were used of m...
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Line 13, column 316, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
... simple to be the status of the wealth. Whats more, in that time, people in high rank...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, conversely, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, well, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 10.4613686534 201% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84827586207 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33534848716 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475862068966 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.0 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 2.5761589404 466% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.9597524911 49.2860985944 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.428571429 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06452816374 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404790536283 0.272083759551 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149627391945 0.0996497079465 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892605028907 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210916702402 0.162205337803 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118782530591 0.0443174109184 268% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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