TPO40 integrated writing
The reading and listening materials have a debate on the availability to maintain a human presence on Venus. The writer believes that it is impossible for people to permanently live there, which is contradicted by the following lecture. The professor proposes that people can establish a station floating at the Venus’ atmosphere 55 kilometers above the surface like a balloon.
Firstly, the writer claims that the extreme atmospheric pressure at Venus' surface will crush everything humans land on it. However, the speaker points out that the pressure at the 55 kilometers height above the surface is much lower than it at the surface, equal with the atmospheric pressure on Earth. As a result, people are enabled to avoid the danger of getting crushed.
Secondly, the author states that the absence of water and oxygen makes it impractical to establish a permanent station on Venus, while the lecture views this issue from an opposite angle. According to the professor, people can take advantages of the existence of compounds such as carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid to make oxygen and water. They can be produced through chemical process by those chemical materials which can be easily obtained on Venus. Therefore, the import of oxygen and water from Earth is not necessary.
Thirdly, the passage argues that people are not able to settle on Venus permanently due to the block and reflection of sunlight by thick clouds. On the contrary, in accordance with the professor, this claim does not hold water. It is because the cloud is not quite thick at 55 kilometers height despite of a few presence. Correspondingly, there will be considerable amount of sunlight filtering through. Besides, the reflected light can also be utilized, so the solar-powered cell can collect the solar energy both above and below the clouds. Consequently, more than enough electricity can be generated to power the station.
To sum up, the author's statements are totally refuted by the professor, and whether Venus can support human settlement is still under heated discussion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 238, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... contradicted by the following lecture. The professor proposes that people can esta...
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Line 4, column 308, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun presence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little presence'.
Suggestion: little presence
...ck at 55 kilometers height despite of a few presence. Correspondingly, there will be conside...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, while, such as, as a result, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1373.03311258 126% => OK
No of words: 335.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17313432836 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82554304036 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558208955224 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 419.366225166 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8563068439 49.2860985944 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.941176471 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7058823529 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.70588235294 7.06452816374 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376272203486 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1074822162 0.0996497079465 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505717026533 0.0662205650399 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187282885065 0.162205337803 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512338640083 0.0443174109184 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 63.6247240618 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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