TPO53Independent Task-Many countries require cigarette smokers to pay particularly high taxes on their purchases of cigarettes; similar taxes are being considered for unhealthy foods. The policy of imposing high taxes on cigarettes and other unhealthy products has a number of social benefits.
First of all, the taxes discourage people from indulging in unhealthy behaviors. Raising taxes on cigarettes, for instance, leads people to buy fewer of them. Smoking has declined as taxes on tobacco have risen, showing that these taxes do work to make society healthier. It can be expected that imposing similar taxes on unhealthy food and beverages would help reduce obesity rates.
Second, taxes of this kind are financially fair. When people get sick as a result of their smoking or eating unhealthy foods, they create medical costs. It is unfair that everyone in the society, including nonsmokers and people who follow a healthy diet, should contribute equally to covering these costs. Taxing people who engage in unhealthy behaviors creates extra income that can be used to cover the medical costs. In this way, some of the financial burden is shifted from all of society to just those who choose to participate in the unhealthy activities.
Finally, the high rate of taxation on cigarettes significantly increases revenue for the government. In addition to using this tax revenue on medical assistance, governments often use the revenue for other projects that benefit public welfare, such as building stadiums or creating public parks. Even basic government-supported services like public education benefit from these taxes. Thus, the taxes on cigarettes, and the proposed taxes on unhealthy foods, benefit everyone.
Both the reading and listening parts offer two opposite views about the high taxation of cigarettes and unhealthy foods. The passage lists three social advantages of this high tax; otherwise, the professor challenges each of them by the concrete clues.
First of all, the article stated the high tax discourages people from smoking or having an unhealthy diet as one of the benefits; on the other hand, the lecturer refutes it. According to her assertation, the high tax not also discourages people from smoking; but also persuades them to smoke cheaper and low-quality cigarette, which has a more harmful impact on the people health status. Furthermore, the high tax of junk food does not prevent their purchases; indeed, people do buy those unhealthy foods and their high costs cause people do have little money for healthy food. Consequently, neither the high tax of cigarette nor high tax of unhealthy food does encourage indulging in unhealthy behavior.
Secondly, meanwhile, the text referred to the fairness of high tax in the scope of financial as another advantage of the high taxation; the instructor, in contrast, rejects this one too. As she explains, the fairness depends on various perspective. Whereas the people with healthy habit considered this action as justice, the people with an unhealthy lifestyle did not. Especially, by the consideration of income, the same tax for entire people is not fair. For instance, the equal tax for both persons with low and high income is not fair, since the individual with smaller income feels more burden than the person with a higher one. Thus, this action does not provide justice between people.
Finally, the last benefit is mentioned by the passage is the high rate tax acts as the additional financial source for the government projects; on the contrary, the professor casts doubts at this benefit too. Based on her assertation, by this action, the government cannot ban or prohibit smoking and unhealthy habits, since they provide a sufficient amount of money for projects. Besides, by this prohibition, the governor will lose the million dollars supports. All in all, the benefit will halt the execution of public policy for controlling unhealthy habits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, while, for instance, in contrast, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 12.0772626932 8% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1373.03311258 136% => OK
No of words: 361.0 270.72406181 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16897506925 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67456938853 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 145.348785872 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545706371191 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 419.366225166 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 17.0 8.23620309051 206% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 2.5761589404 349% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8058339329 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.625 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.625 7.06452816374 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 4.45695364238 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331285022767 0.272083759551 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11070715261 0.0996497079465 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090355101387 0.0662205650399 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201437474159 0.162205337803 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679485126643 0.0443174109184 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 63.6247240618 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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