TPO62 Throughout the world s oceans hard structures such as natural reefs provide ideal marine habitats Reefs provide hard surfaces to which plants coral and sponges can attach and thereby provide food and shelter for many types of fish Recently workers i | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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TPO62
Throughout the world's oceans, hard structures such as natural reefs provide ideal marine habitats. Reefs provide hard surfaces to which plants, coral and sponges can attach, and thereby provide food and shelter for many types of fish. Recently, workers in the fishing industry have tried to increase the amount of suitable habitat for fish by construction artificial reefs from old metal objects and industrial materials and placing them in coastal waters. Artificial reefs have several benefits.
Many fishers believe that by giving fish more places to gather and reproduce artificial reefs have increased the populations of some species of fish. For example a report from one extensive artificial reef program in the Gulf of Mexico shows that the number of red snapper fish harvested in the area has increased by as much as ten times compared with harvests century ago. The increases in the number of fish caught began after the start of the artificial reef program.
Artificial reefs can also improve the economic competitiveness of small-scale fishers. This is because small-scale fishers are able to create their own private artificial reefs in secret locations only they know. Currently, small-scale fishers struggle to compete with larger corporations because fishing grounds are limited in number and most are known to everyone. Creating fishing areas known only to the fishers who make them will help independent fishers support themselves and their local communities.
Finally, artificial reefs are a good way to recycle materials no longer needed for other purposes. Artificial reefs can be made from old cars and other objects that are otherwise difficult to dispose of. Once these materials have been cleaned to ensure that no harmful chemicals remain, they can be placed in the ocean to serve as reefs for marine life. Artificial reefs thus provide a relatively inexpensive, environmentally friendly way to reuse materials.

Construction of artificial reefs for the purpose of sheltering fish or another animals have gathered attention in recent years. The author proposes three potential benefits to that while the lecturer challenges them.

First, some fishers have reported that construction of artificial reefs have resulted in fish population increase in some regions. They have reported a ten fold increase of snapper fish population in the Gulf of Mexico. The lecturer argues that this increase is merely due to the attraction of fish from other reefs. Additionally, this might have an adverse impact because the accumulation of fish to a region will result in the decline of fish population because more fishers will be gather in certain regions.

Moreover, the professor thinks that concealing the location of artificial reefs will have several disadvantages. The author thinks that local fishers can make their own artificial reefs and hide its location from others so they can only benefit from it. This can have several disadvantages like other local boats might crash into these or nets might torn apart. So, local fishers should disclose the location of their reefs and avoid these incidents.

Lastly, the notion of recycling materials for artificial reefs is challenged by the lecturer as well. According to the author, people can clean materials of harmful chemicals and use it as artificial reefs. This will be an environmentally friendly and inexpensive option for fishers. The speaker brings up the Osborne reef incident to disagree with this idea. The Osborne reef was made up of several tires and as the result of a storm, the tires fall apart and killed other plants and fish on the seefloor.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have torn' or 'tear'?
Suggestion: have torn; tear
...ts might crash into these or nets might torn apart. So, local fishers should disclos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, lastly, moreover, so, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1425.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 274.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20072992701 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69376938902 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518248175182 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.6243185865 49.2860985944 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93333333333 7.06452816374 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43875804457 0.272083759551 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149038137861 0.0996497079465 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698922704166 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258306884845 0.162205337803 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396451788408 0.0443174109184 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, lastly, moreover, so, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments