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tuna farming has faced several problems and criticisms

Recently, there has been a ton of problems as to farm tuna fish . More specifically, in regards to the passage, the writer puts forth the idea that overfishing decreased the number of wild tuna fish. In the listening passage, the lecturer is quick to point out that there are some serious flaw in the writer's claim. In fact, the professor believes there are several promising solutions for farming this kind of fish and addresses, in detail, the trouble with each point made in the reading test.

First and foremost, the author in the article states that farms are forced to capture tuna females at a young age to stock their farms. But, captured females are not so mature to lay eggs. Some professionals, in the same field, however, stand in firm opposition to this claim. In the listening passage for example, the speaker states with development in scientific method there are different Hormones for mature young females to lay eggs. He goes on to say that these kinds of Hormones are with low health risks and could help tuna fish population.
One group of scholars, represented by the writer think that tuna rising on farms are very expensive because they need enough high protein food from other fish. Of course, though, not all experts in this field believe this claim is accurate. Again, the lecturer specifically, addresses this claim when he states wild tuna fish can feed on plants that is inexpensive food for them and in this way for feeding fish the cost kept low.
Finally, the author wraps his argument by positing that tuna confined to ocean cages likely become infested with parasites like blood flukes. Not surprisingly, the professor takes issue with this claim by contending that in some of the ocean that has deep and freshwater or near the shore the farming can continue without any parasites.
To sum up, both the writer and lecturer hold conflicting views about farming wild tuna fish. It is clear that they will have trouble finding common ground on this issue.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...n a ton of problems as to farm tuna fish . More specifically, in regards to the pa...
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Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
... to farm tuna fish . More specifically, in regards to the passage, the writer puts forth the ...
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Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'flaws'?
Suggestion: flaws
...o point out that there are some serious flaw in the writers claim. In fact, the prof...
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Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...e with this claim by contending that in some of the ocean that has deep and freshwater or n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, so, as to, for example, in fact, kind of, of course, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 341.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84164222874 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41406632477 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 145.348785872 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563049853372 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8897322132 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.1875 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06452816374 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174609852721 0.272083759551 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062868815584 0.0996497079465 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765069398177 0.0662205650399 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100382089639 0.162205337803 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461735938864 0.0443174109184 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, so, as to, for example, in fact, kind of, of course, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments