In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients’ medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients’ records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients* health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors’ offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
Based on given materials, the article as well as the reading discusses storing medical data electronically. The author states that this approach is advantageous for several reasons. The lecturer provides several ideas to repudiate this claim.
Initially, it is alleged in the reading that using such procedure can lead to a reduction in cost since electronic records does not virtually occupy any space in order to store them. However, the lecturer asserts that it can not lead to a significant saving as albeit doctors use electronic record but at the same time they keep using paper. She allude to the fact that paper records are needed for back up and also for signature authentication.
Second, the writer proclaims that using electric records reduce errors due to illegible handwriting or nonstandard organization of paper records. Yet again, the speaker underscores that doctors still use paper and pen to examine a patient and then later an office staff enters the data to a computer as a result it can still leads to data errors. This is because office members must read the forms from a written paper and then fill out electronic forms.
The last point of contention between the listening and the reading passages is aggregation of data for medical researches. The author states that the electronical storage of medical records provides researchers a huge amount of aggregated data in a format which useful information can be extracted from efficiently. On the other hand, the lecturer says that researchers still might find it difficult to use such information because they are protected under the strict privacy laws. She point to that according to this law information must stay private and researchers need permission of patients in order to use this data which the patient might not permit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'alludes'.
Suggestion: alludes
...he same time they keep using paper. She allude to the fact that paper records are need...
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Line 9, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e errors due to illegible handwriting or nonstandard organization of paper record...
^^
Line 9, column 327, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
... to a computer as a result it can still leads to data errors. This is because office ...
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Line 13, column 487, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'points'.
Suggestion: points
...cted under the strict privacy laws. She point to that according to this law informati...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, still, then, well, as to, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 296.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14864864865 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77763523293 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550675675676 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8255012089 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.230769231 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7692307692 21.698381199 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228698374191 0.272083759551 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759371762835 0.0996497079465 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473303821888 0.0662205650399 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1274359306 0.162205337803 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435866553391 0.0443174109184 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.