In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The article states that using electronic recording system instead of traditional paper recording system for medical iniformation in U.S. will have many advantages for doctors and researchers. However, the professor does not believe so and says that none of those pluses are certain. She opposes all the reasons.
First, the reading avers that using electronic recording system will decrease cost of storage and transferring, in addition, it will give an easy access to the documents to doctors. On the other hand, the speaker refutes this opinion by explaining that doctors who adopted new electronic system has continued the papaer recording version for some legal reasons, since the legal documents need signature. As a results they should pay for cost of both system, which it is cost of storage of paper documents and establish electronic system.
Second, the author asserts that reducing the chance of error will decrease by electonic records system, because it eliminate the bad ahndwriting problems. The electronic record system cannot eliminate the chance of error while doctors use pen and apper while they examine patients, the professor says. She puts forth thatmedical staffs should interperate those writing and enter them in computer system, consequently, the chance of error because of poor handwriting still exist.
Third, the author of article claims that electronic medical records provide a huge amounts of patients' data which they have not been available in the previous paper system. However, the professor repudiates this benefit by explaininn that with the new electronic recording system there are many restricting laws which prohibite researchers to give access to those data. She mentions that in the U.S. privacy laws help patients to restrict any access to their medical records. The researcher should give many allowance from teh legislatores and patients to read these information. Then it will not be a benefit for electronic system by itself.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, second, so, still, then, third, while, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 309.0 270.72406181 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40129449838 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68215878814 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53074433657 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7287689441 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.214285714 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259005502608 0.272083759551 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916503110122 0.0996497079465 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755572781739 0.0662205650399 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164163028286 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535890865496 0.0443174109184 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.