In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The reading and the lecture both are about the ways of medical information can be stored. The author feels that storing medical records of the patient's in E- forms are advantageous over the paper records. The lecturer challenges all the claims made by the author and indicates them hereunder.
First of all, the lecturer says that by saving information as electronic is not going to save money, because the doctors keep doing the paperwork in case of emergency and also for back up information. For instance, in case of an emergency, the doctor has to note down the history of the patient and sign the paperwork in order to start any treatment. Moreover, for this type, they have no choice to hamper the process of paper records. Additionally, they still have to pay for the storage in order to maintain the paper records in case of emergencies. This particular point contrasts with the reading. The reading states that by maintaining electronic records money can be saved when compared to the paper records.
Secondly, the professor mentions that most of the doctors, even after adapting to the electronic records they still make some paperwork because after noting points on a paper they will enter the information into the computer whenever they get time. Furthermore, the clinic staff also use the paperwork for any emergencies, and the possibility of making mistakes cannot be avoided. For example, when the office staff does not understand the writings of a doctor when entering the system will create enormous errors in the computer. On the other hand, the reading argues that errors can be avoided by adapting to an electronic form of storage.
Finally, the article posits that research can be done very easily if all the records are available in the electronic system because they can extract the information available on a computer despite any location. The tutor counteracts this point and provides that restrictions are high for the medical records to obtain them. In the U.S the laws and strict privacy rules of patients make it difficult to grab them. Moreover, as there are strict rules and complicated procedure to get the information we want, we need to take special permissions from the higher authorities and also from the patients. This point can be illustrated as the patients can also block their own details and medical records for privacy and can render whenever they need.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, as to, for example, for instance, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 30.3222958057 175% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 1373.03311258 146% => OK
No of words: 401.0 270.72406181 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00748129676 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65501842345 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 145.348785872 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486284289277 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 419.366225166 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7889682362 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.555555556 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245444078302 0.272083759551 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800286601721 0.0996497079465 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754439489754 0.0662205650399 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166377562486 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736991025157 0.0443174109184 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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