What makes personality?
Both the reading passage and the lecture discuss what makes people's personalities. The reading argues that the way that humans deal with the never-ending conflicts that they face is what determines their personalities. On the contrary, the professor states that personality is determined by the vision that people have for themselves and how they ensure that they reach that type of life.
The passage states that humans are subjects to internal and external conflicts that shape their personalities. For instance, when one wakes up, he or she has to decide what to eat or to wear. Similarly people who want to live a particular type of life which is not accepted by their society experience conflicting feelings about whether or not they should conform to the society. The way one deals with the above conflicts is the determinant of his or her personality.
Unlike the author of the article, the professor thinks that personality is not determined by the ways of handling conflicts. Instead, it is shaped by how much the person is fulfilled. According to the professor, people are subjected to one single force, the need to live a satisfying life, that they always pursue. He goes on by saying that people have a representation of an ideal life.Their personalities is determined by the amount of work they put in to achieve that fulfilled life and how close they are to their perception of the perfect life they envision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 193, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...e has to decide what to eat or to wear. Similarly people who want to live a particular ty...
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Line 2, column 330, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...y experience conflicting feelings about whether or not they should conform to the society. The...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Their
... have a representation of an ideal life.Their personalities is determined by the amou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, similarly, so, as to, for instance, by the way, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 22.412803532 147% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1188.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 240.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87999565972 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 145.348785872 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520833333333 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9787108342 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170579696501 0.272083759551 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722119634481 0.0996497079465 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073526413613 0.0662205650399 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121052342292 0.162205337803 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763255650132 0.0443174109184 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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