The world’s forests are facing increasing pressure which, if left unchecked, will threaten the health of many industries, economies, nations, and lives. The development of an international fund to help developing countries implement useful conservation techniques in forest protection is the best way to protect the world’s forests and hopefully reverse negative trends that imperil our forests. Using the internationally established forest protection fund to protect forest agriculture is perhaps the most important initiative. Dispersing these funds to governments, land owners, and farmers will allow them to resist intrusions by the logging industry, oil companies, and property developers who are after their land. This is a very specific initiative that will help agricultural areas from being developed into environmentally damaging industries and ensure that agricultural farm use is uninterrupted. A second use of this protection fund could be used to develop the economies of villages and tribal communities located in forest areas. By parceling out funds to provide villagers and tribal residents of forests with a stipend will help these people continue their way of life and resist pressure to convert their forest land to the above mentioned industries. Providing living stipends and other financial aid to forest residents will help people afford education, health services, and nutritional aid so that they are less tempted to resort to destructive or exploitative forest practices to make a living. Much of the global concern with deforestation focuses on the alarming loss of biodiversity. Humans use thousands of species of plants and animals on a daily basis for food, shelter, clothing and medicinal needs. Deforestation threatens species that humans rely on for these essential services. Using the international fund to help governments and people establish protected forest areas is the best way to maintain valuable forest biodiversity and protect species from exploitation, endangerment and extinction.
The reading passage states that an international fund is the best way to protect the world’s forest due to the forests is facing increasing pressure. Whereas the lecturer suggests that using the fund to protect the forest in the world is not a good idea. The lecturer casts doubt the main ideas made in the reading passage by providing three arguments.
First of all, according to the reading, using internationally established forest protection fun to protect forest-agriculture will be helpful for the forest. However, the lecturer disputes the point. He thinks that forest-agriculture is a destructive force for the ecosystem. With the increasing population, farmers are facing consistent pressure. In order to solve the problem, they have to produce more yields by using modern agriculture techniques such as chemical materials which would be used to kill the pest in the farmland. But this approach is harmful to the environment because of water pollution. In turn, using fund to protect forest-agriculture is not an efficient way to protect the forest.
Secondly, the reading claims that this protection fund could be used to develop the economies of local villages and tribal communities. They will use this money to live without cutting down trees and resist logging industries. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes the argument. He maintains that the fund is from the forest donors, which will be used by governments, not the local residents. Furthermore, there is no guarantee that governments will use the money to employ some appropriate methods to protect the forest. Therefore, it is not a good way for forest protection by doing so.
Finally, the author of the reading shows that using the fund to help governments and people is better for the loss of biodiversity. On the other hand, the lecturer explains that people will not plant trees in the area if they have this fund but rather do some commercial practices. Without more trees, it is no way to maintain forest biodiversity. Therefore, it is nothing to do with forest protection.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... forests is facing increasing pressure. Whereas the lecturer suggests that using the fu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1373.03311258 126% => OK
No of words: 334.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17964071856 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0890485505 2.5805825403 120% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48502994012 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6590468872 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247929271879 0.272083759551 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764580603744 0.0996497079465 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063825275367 0.0662205650399 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160488097567 0.162205337803 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371892987767 0.0443174109184 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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