Young people have no influence on the important decision that determine the future of society as a whole.
Some people think that young adults are less responsible. People believe that young adults focus only on their own interests. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that young people are more involved in the society. The basis of my opinion is educational and social.
From an educational perspective, young people are well educated. Todays most of the young adults attend college for better education. Colleges provide the society with more open minded people. Such as, doctors, pharmacists and engineering. There are also more teachers and professor , comparing to 50 years ago. All those well educated people are able to help their community in a proper way. For example, doctors are taking the decision where to build a hospital, in the rural area or in the urban area. Which kinds of people need more care. Also the same for pharmacist. Teachers are able to educate a huge number of children. Professor are contributing more to their society by providing a better educated students to the society. That is why I think that young educated adults are more involved in their society than before.
Socially, due to the advance in the technology nowadays, which allow people to communicate easily, Young adults become more involved in their society than before. For example, the social media like the face book facilitate the way people know each others. It become so easy to share information on the face book. Many young adults create groups on the face book to help their society, such as collecting money for planting trees in the neighborhood. Other make groups for volunteering some time to clean their town. All these groups are published by young adults to help their society. On the other hand, old people are hardly access the internet. They are not able to adapt their lives to the new technology. To benefit the society you have to be more social active like young adults.
Educationally, the best reward parents can give to children is to teach them the meaning of the money. To teach them how to save money. If parents want to encourage their children, they will reward them by giving them points. Personally, I tried this method with my children. It is perfect. For example, every time my son gets high grade in a test, I give him some points. Then at the end of the month we transfer the points to money. For instance, if he earns 20 points during the month , I will give him 20 dollars to spend. But he has to tell me on what he will spend his money, and I have to agree or disagree. That way I teach my son the value of the money. Also I limit my son from spending money on unnecessary stuff.
In conclusion for the reasons I mentioned above I a agree that the most influenced people on the society are the young people. The become more educated than before. By their education they could benefit the society in many different ways. Also they are more social active the old people as they can easily deal with the new technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, well, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 22.412803532 263% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 30.3222958057 224% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2523.0 1373.03311258 184% => OK
No of words: 537.0 270.72406181 198% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69832402235 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.04702891845 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47612992994 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 145.348785872 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454376163873 0.540411800872 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 791.1 419.366225166 189% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 3.25607064018 338% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 40.0 13.0662251656 306% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 13.0 21.2450331126 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4563521622 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.075 110.228320801 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.425 21.698381199 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.875 7.06452816374 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 4.19205298013 453% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 4.33554083885 554% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.27373068433 351% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173756782132 0.272083759551 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0442147009985 0.0996497079465 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518334512963 0.0662205650399 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116307108942 0.162205337803 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550188985609 0.0443174109184 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 13.3589403974 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 53.8541721854 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 12.2367328918 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.42419426049 85% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 63.6247240618 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.7273730684 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.498013245 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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