Zoos
Some critics contend that keeping animals in zoos is inhumane and must be changed. They believe that zoos are unnatural and provide no real benefit to society besides providing entertainment at the expense of the animals involved. The truth is that zoos are essential to a modern culture that places value in animal life.
Animals are treated well in zoos. In fact, the most passionate animal lovers are usually the animal keepers found in zoos. They ensure that the animals maintain the same level of psychological “happiness” as their wild counterparts. They, along with the zoo itself, help animals live longer, feed better, and suffer from fewer diseases; These animals are allowed to exist without the fear of predation or famine because of zoos.
Additionally, zoos are no longer seen as or marketed as forms of entertainment, but as education. Zoos work to inform the public about exhibited animals, wildlife in general, and the important need to preserve our Earth. The emphasis on conservation and education is an important one. Visitors are taught about issues and animals that they would never have direct experience with otherwise. Thus, zoos provide a crucial tool to direct the public towards more humane ways to look at the world.
Finally, zoos serve the vital function of helping to protect and preserve endangered species. For example, the Golden Lion Tamarins are an endangered species native to Brazil. In the early part of the 1970s, only around 200 of these small monkeys existed. It was only through the coordinated actions of several zoos and the Brazilian government that these animals were saved from extinction. Today, as a result of these efforts, you can find about 1,500 living in the wild.
The reading states that zoos are essential for modern culture and presents 3 reasons. However, the professor claims that zoos do not benefit in any manner and refutes each of the reasons.
First, the reading states that animals are treated really well in zoo. However, the professor refutes the reason by explaining that the treatment does not look pretty. He illustrates that in one zoo, two red pandas died due to rat poison and many cases are present such as this. He further explains that in zoos the animals lack care. As a result, the professor states that zoos do not benefit in any manner.
Second, the reading reasons that animals are not seen as entertainment but as education. In contrast, the author states that zoos houses animals that attract more tourist. He explains that even though animals are used as mean of education, tourists may misunderstand it and many tourists will not be able to understand. Consequently, the author claims that animals cannot serve as form of education.
Finally, the reading supports the argument by explaining that zoos help preserve endangered species. However, the professor refutes the support by explaining that this is problematic. He explains that the success rate is really low and many endangered species breed with their own family members, which results in no advantage. Consequently, the professor states that zoos help to preserve endangered species is problematic and serves no advantage.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, look, may, really, second, so, well, as for, in contrast, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1218.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 236.0 270.72406181 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16101694915 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68721584282 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508474576271 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 367.2 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.9927989629 49.2860985944 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.2 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7333333333 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248083856531 0.272083759551 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101996627588 0.0996497079465 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650512538074 0.0662205650399 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163653142232 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047938669958 0.0443174109184 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, look, may, really, second, so, well, as for, in contrast, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1218.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 236.0 270.72406181 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16101694915 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68721584282 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508474576271 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 367.2 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.9927989629 49.2860985944 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.2 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7333333333 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248083856531 0.272083759551 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101996627588 0.0996497079465 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650512538074 0.0662205650399 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163653142232 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047938669958 0.0443174109184 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.