Zoos
Some critics contend that keeping animals in zoos is inhumane and must be changed. They believe that zoos are unnatural and provide no real benefit to society besides providing entertainment at the expense of the animals involved. The truth is that zoos are essential to a modern culture that places value in animal life.
Animals are treated well in zoos. In fact, the most passionate animal lovers are usually the animal keepers found in zoos. They ensure that the animals maintain the same level of psychological “happiness” as their wild counterparts. They, along with the zoo itself, help animals live longer, feed better, and suffer from fewer diseases; These animals are allowed to exist without the fear of predation or famine because of zoos.
Additionally, zoos are no longer seen as or marketed as forms of entertainment, but as education. Zoos work to inform the public about exhibited animals, wildlife in general, and the important need to preserve our Earth. The emphasis on conservation and education is an important one. Visitors are taught about issues and animals that they would never have direct experience with otherwise. Thus, zoos provide a crucial tool to direct the public towards more humane ways to look at the world.
Finally, zoos serve the vital function of helping to protect and preserve endangered species. For example, the Golden Lion Tamarins are an endangered species native to Brazil. In the early part of the 1970s, only around 200 of these small monkeys existed. It was only through the coordinated actions of several zoos and the Brazilian government that these animals were saved from extinction. Today, as a result of these efforts, you can find about 1,500 living in the wild.
The reading passage proposes that the claims made by people who condemn zoos are false. It gives three reasons for this. The professor talks about how these reasons are false, and propounding that zoos are detrimental for animals as whole.
First point mentioned by the passage is that animal zookeepers are really kind and most caring towards animals. It also states that animals are taken care of in zoos better than in their natural habitat. Professor states that animal treatment in zoos is not often pretty. Regarding animal safety, the professor gives an example of an incident where Red Pandas were found dead. He mentions that such an incident could have been prevent by diligent efforts by Safety Manager of the zoo, who were not present at the site of incident. Professor iterates that this highlights how the animal safety scenario in zoo is bad.
Second point in the passage states that, as opposed to past, zoos are now seen as sites for education and not entertainment. To counter this, professor says that majority of people still see zoos as forms of entertainment. More often than not, the animals in the zoo are selected specifically to attract visitors, and not to impart education. This fact can be seen by visitors as it is alright to use animals for your own purposes. In addition to that, most people fail to understand and appreciate the conditions of the animals because they are represented in artificial and misleading way.
Lastly, the passage gives an example of Gold Lion Tamarins to highlight how zoos contribute towards revival of endangered species. However, professor counters this by mentioning how zoos have low success rate, and this example is very specific. Further adding how zoos host very less number of animals of a particular species, these animals mostly interbreed among themselves. This has caused rise in birth defects. Furthermore, professor states that there is no distinctive advantage for zoos as compared to animal's natural habitat, in case of revival of endangered animals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'prevented'.
Suggestion: prevented
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, really, regarding, second, so, still, as for, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 335.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08059701493 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61244344834 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 145.348785872 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534328358209 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6354181203 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5789473684 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6315789474 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208813616622 0.272083759551 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751206058451 0.0996497079465 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042405893011 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138239022741 0.162205337803 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265729081119 0.0443174109184 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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