Certain kinds of music promote learning in children life. Do you agree or disagree?

Recently, using certain kinds of music for promoting learning in children life has sparked an ongoing controversy, which inevitably leads to a moot question " what are positive and negative consequences?". Whereas it is a widely held view that music is beneficial, I will discuss controversial aspects of that throughout this essay.
From the educational standpoint, learning music is bound up inextricably with the development of creativity, which indicates they lead to both educational policy and educational reform. As a well-known example, a longitudinal study conducted by eminent scientists in 2014 demonstrates the relationship between academic context and music-based education as well as an exponential increase in comprehensive assessment. Their academic criticism was impressive. Researchers, nevertheless, paid heed to spontaneous learning and critical thinking alike. Consequently, my empirical evidence presented thus far supports the contention that the likelihood of the intellectual ability is correlated positively with not only mental capability but also music-based curriculums.
Within the realm of psychology, without the slightest doubt, the impacts of music attribute to prosperity in children's lives, in that it would come down to motivation and instinct interest. A salient example of such attribution is stereotyped curriculum, which is a cause for concern since it was mistaken to take music theories for granted. Had there been a paradigm shift earlier, scholars might have had the opportunity to pinpoint the traditional method problems. Likewise, hardly had they confined their attention to psychiatry-based education and even music exams. Besides, this criterion is an indispensable part of modern lifestyle. Hence, it is reasonable to infer the pivotal role of musical progress.
to conclude, as for myself, as the saying goes"all's well that ends well," after analyzing what elaborated above, I entirely agree that the role of music in child life is highly beneficial.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, hence, if, likewise, nevertheless, so, thus, well, whereas, as for, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 6.10837438424 49% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 20.9802955665 95% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 31.9359605911 122% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.75862068966 174% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1207.87684729 143% => OK
No of words: 296.0 242.827586207 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84459459459 5.00649968141 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4203607685 2.71678728327 126% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 139.433497537 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665540540541 0.580463131201 115% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 379.143842365 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8398701175 50.4703680194 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.571428571 104.977214359 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.9669160288 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.25397266985 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 6.9802955665 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209501767418 0.242375264174 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576253986275 0.0925447433944 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064010963475 0.071462118173 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125090000187 0.151781067708 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678901056579 0.0609392437508 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 12.6369458128 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 53.1260098522 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.9458128079 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.59 11.5310837438 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.03 8.32886699507 132% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 55.0591133005 216% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 9.94827586207 171% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.5123152709 162% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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