Effective learning requires time, comfort and peace so it is impossible to combine study and employment. Study and employment distract one from another. To what extent do you think the statements are realistic? Support your opinion with examples?
One of the most conspicuous trends in today's world is the colossal upsurge in the employment of students while studying. There is widespread worry that it would only lead to the myriad of concerns in the society. I am of the strong opinion that this apprehension is unwarranted and so should be rejected.
There is a deluge of arguments in favor of my stance. The most preponderant one is that students should take their financial responsibilities once they reach in college and it can only be possible by doing part-time jobs. Not only can this situation increase their confidence in themselves but also can teach them how to manage time between work and study without getting distracted. It needs not mention that these benefits stand students in good stead as far as their educational career is concerned.
The other pivotal aspect of the argument is that learning time management is vital to a student's success. Besides, earning extra money can make them independent and career oriented. For instance, according to the study published in "Journal of Psychology," the student engaged in work during their education are more successful in practical lives that those who are unemployed.
In the view of arguments outlined above, one can conclude that the benefits of working during student life are indeed too great to ignore.
Comments
good points and comments.. I
good points and comments.. I still do not understand your score is very low by testbig. Is it an efficient way to score for PTE ?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... learning time management is vital to a students success. Besides, earning extra money c...
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Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...published in 'Journal of Psychology,' the student engaged in work during the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 6.10837438424 131% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 20.9802955665 114% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 31.9359605911 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.75862068966 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1121.0 1207.87684729 93% => OK
No of words: 220.0 242.827586207 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09545454545 5.00649968141 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.92707691288 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92324327412 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 139.433497537 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609090909091 0.580463131201 105% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 379.143842365 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.6157635468 43% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4933636044 50.4703680194 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.909090909 104.977214359 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.9669160288 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 7.25397266985 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0944759594917 0.242375264174 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0331572210351 0.0925447433944 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0274826979352 0.071462118173 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0543453379577 0.151781067708 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187527415691 0.0609392437508 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 12.6369458128 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.1260098522 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.9458128079 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 11.5310837438 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 55.0591133005 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.94827586207 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.5123152709 124% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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