Effective learning requires time, comfort and peace so it is impossible to combine study and employment. Study and employment distract one from another. To what extent do you think the statements are realistic? Support your opinion with examples?

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Effective learning requires time, comfort and peace so it is impossible to combine study and employment. Study and employment distract one from another. To what extent do you think the statements are realistic? Support your opinion with examples?

Recently, the phenomenon of studying and working at the same time and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although this combining is beneficial as it regarded by the substantial number of individuals, others hold opponents views. I am inclined to believe that this issue might have some detrimental effects as it could develop some nagative aspects for its adherents.

From a social standpoint, there are several demerits on the combination of studying and working at the same time. These disadvantages are rooted in the fact of diminishing concentration. From my own experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered the negative points of this decision. Firstly, by doing this idea, these inhabitants do not have sufficient effeciency both in their cources and at work. Furthermore, the lack of concentration leads to some confrontations and making faults. Moreover, when someone allocate all their time for studying and working, does not have adequate time for resting and after a while they will be exhuasted.

On the one hand, there is no doubt the idea of instructing and having jobs at the same time has some advocates. They argued that by facing citizens particularly the youths in such difficult conditions, their confidence will be enhanced. Hence, they can boost themselves and be full prepared in order to gain a prosperous future. According to research undertaken by a prestigious university, the dwellers who are employee during their studying time have strong charactristics and personaIity.

In conclusion, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that the drawbacks of studying while you are working are far more outweigh of their merits.

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Average: 7.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 561, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'allocates'.
Suggestion: allocates
...d making faults. Moreover, when someone allocate all their time for studying and working...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... a prestigious university, the dwellers who are employee during their studying time hav...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 20.9802955665 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 31.9359605911 103% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1207.87684729 124% => OK
No of words: 278.0 242.827586207 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37050359712 5.00649968141 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10905629475 2.71678728327 114% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 139.433497537 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611510791367 0.580463131201 105% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 379.143842365 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.6157635468 173% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9633279261 50.4703680194 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.642857143 104.977214359 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.9669160288 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.25397266985 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133886847215 0.242375264174 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448549333285 0.0925447433944 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435807659033 0.071462118173 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078273796632 0.151781067708 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234941323005 0.0609392437508 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 12.6369458128 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.1260098522 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.9458128079 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 11.5310837438 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.32886699507 113% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 55.0591133005 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.94827586207 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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