Initiating celebrities in sports and movies is good or bad?

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Initiating celebrities in sports and movies is good or bad?

One of the most conspicuous trends of today’s world is colossal upsurge in initiating celebrities .There is a wide spread worry that this will only lead to a myriad of concerns in one’s life. However, I do not entirely accept this and I will explain why in this essay.
There are a number of arguments in favor of my stance. The most preponderant one is that celebrities sports can not only contributed to spending millions of dollars on shopping. They put on expensive designer garments and drive super luxury cars. But they also lead to numerous others benefits in various fields. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offeres, not only can one benefits more when it comes to being effective, but they can also enhance the productivity and quality of their lives, with much ease efficacy and convenience needless to say all these merits stand one is good stead, as for arguments their chances of prosperity and excellence is concerned.
Another pivotal aspect of the afore mentioned proposition is that it is only likely to help one think and excel in varied areas .Besides , only when one follows such a systems can they broaden their horizon .Thus learning such essential attributes as responsibility dedication as a perseverance. Hence, it is apparent why many are in favor of celebrities in sports and movies.
In view of the argument outlined above, one can conclude that the benefits and drawbacks of celebrities in sports and movies are indeed to great to ignore.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, however, if, so, thus, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 8.36945812808 131% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 20.9802955665 105% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1240.0 1207.87684729 103% => OK
No of words: 251.0 242.827586207 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94023904382 5.00649968141 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80793157285 2.71678728327 103% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 139.433497537 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577689243028 0.580463131201 100% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 379.143842365 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6551724138 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.711469059 50.4703680194 200% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 104.977214359 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1 20.9669160288 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 7.25397266985 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.33497536946 244% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149166830392 0.242375264174 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619355713424 0.0925447433944 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746085328185 0.071462118173 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099474200505 0.151781067708 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547774389582 0.0609392437508 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 12.6369458128 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.1260098522 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.9458128079 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.5310837438 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.32886699507 113% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 55.0591133005 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.94827586207 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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