Obesity has been linked to excessive sugar consumption. Some people believe that sugary drinks should be taxed to dissuade people from drinking them while others think that a tax is unnecessary and that public education is the best way to decrease sugar consumption.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Write between 200 and 300 words.
Not only junk food causes obesity but also excessive sugar is equally responsible for it. Some people believes that sugary drink should be taxed to prevent people from drinking them while others argue that a tax in unnecessary and public education and awareness are the best way to decrease sugar consumption. I am inclined to believe that people education towards sugar consumption is important rather imposing tax. This essay will discuss how education and awareness can be helpful to convince people.
First of all, Advantages and disadvantages of sugar consumption in any form should be include in children's curriculum and to make educate them how sugary drinks and juices which contains high amount of sugar can be harmful for physical and mantel well-being specially contributes in obesity. Government should mandate one period to educate children on what should eat and what shouldn't and reward them time to time to follow health habits to encourage them. For instance: In my childhood, we are not allowed to have and sugary drinks even that was prohibited in school premises as well to stay fit.
Second of all, Children should be encourage from tender age towards exercising and physical work out as it will help them to burn out the excessive sugary drink's calories and keep themselves physically fit. Physically fit children have good mantel health as well. School should have one period to dedicated to games and outdoor activity. For instance: Children should have fresh juice after physical work out instead of canned juice which contributes in obesity.
In conclusion, The forgoing discussion propounds the view that people should be more aware and educated about causes of obesity and how sugar drink can be as harmful as junk food and increase their intake of fresh fruit juice or fruits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'included'?
Suggestion: included
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Suggestion: time to
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Message: Did you mean 'encouraged'?
Suggestion: encouraged
...t. Second of all, Children should be encourage from tender age towards exercising and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 6.10837438424 213% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 8.36945812808 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 31.9359605911 116% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1207.87684729 126% => OK
No of words: 296.0 242.827586207 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13175675676 5.00649968141 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5617621958 2.71678728327 94% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 139.433497537 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543918918919 0.580463131201 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 474.3 379.143842365 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.11390511 50.4703680194 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.583333333 104.977214359 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.9669160288 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.25397266985 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 6.9802955665 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426802038553 0.242375264174 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156991323099 0.0925447433944 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.197872785781 0.071462118173 277% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27487435453 0.151781067708 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.198516910285 0.0609392437508 326% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 12.6369458128 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.1260098522 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.9458128079 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 11.5310837438 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32886699507 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 55.0591133005 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.94827586207 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.5123152709 124% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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