As a result of advances in medical care, average life expectancy is increasing for men and women. Do you think most people will see this as a positive development? What are the disadvantages of an ageing population for individuals and society? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations.
The average life expectancy is increasing of both men and women owing to advancement in medical care. Some people assert that this is positive advancement whereas others disagree with this statement. I think this is not a positive development, and it has innumerable disadvantages to both society, and a person himself.
The first main disadvantage is financial stress that may affect certain families. The elderly people are more prone to sickness and would have been sent to hospitals for their regular treatments. These treatments are very expensive and funded by the family members which creates disharmony among them. It has also been observed in some of the families that the old age parents are sent to elderly care centres instead to keep them at their own home.
The second disadvantage is resource allocation stress on the government. It can never be denied that more population means more unemployment and scarcity of natural resources. Hence, the government feel unable to allocate the resources to its all denizens. India, for example, wherein some of the regional areas, people are dying because of appetite. Some of them are committing suicide because of non-availability of jobs in their areas.
In conclusion, it can be said that although the advancement in medical care has increased the life expectancy for both men and women, however; there are certain disadvantages which can never be applauded.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, whereas, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.5418719212 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 20.9802955665 105% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 31.9359605911 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.75862068966 174% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1200.0 1207.87684729 99% => OK
No of words: 228.0 242.827586207 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26315789474 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.92707691288 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90999434666 2.71678728327 107% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 139.433497537 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592105263158 0.580463131201 102% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 379.143842365 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5024630542 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4805427907 50.4703680194 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3076923077 104.977214359 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 20.9669160288 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.25397266985 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260728944882 0.242375264174 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840230255731 0.0925447433944 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927652395087 0.071462118173 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164315370886 0.151781067708 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105104918736 0.0609392437508 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 12.6369458128 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.1260098522 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.9458128079 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 11.5310837438 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 55.0591133005 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.94827586207 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.3980295567 85% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 72.2222222222 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 65.0 Out of 90
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