Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Recently, the phenomenon of placing advertisements in schools and its profound impact has become a long-running dispute among the public. Although it is a widespread belief that advertising is highly beneficial, a fair number of academic researchers are trying to view this from a different angle. Nonetheless, I am inclined to believe that one should carefully weigh up the pros and cons of additional funding.
From a socio-economic standpoint, the traditional education system is inextricably bound up with new technologies, which means it might be a deciding factor in potential audiences, as well as violent contents. For example, a group of eminent scientists in a prestigious university undertook a longitudinal study to demonstrate the relationship between ads and child’s obesity. Not only were the preliminary findings somewhat inconsistent with those of previous studies, but also some convincing evidence presented thus far support the contention that eating fast food is correlated positively with being exposed to ads.
In educational terms, funding by sales of space for advertising is undoubtedly bound up with children behavior, in that it would lead to street crime, failing tests, and educational inequity. According to my first-hand experience, a vivid illustration of such attributions is educational quality, which has given us cause for concern since our modern society has overlooked in taking mass media for granted. Hence, the dominant role of treating children as captive audiences is commonly perceived.
To recapitulate, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides, I broadly agree that the disadvantages of advertising in schools are of more significance. However, the local authorities should amend the existing legislation to minimize undesirable side effects of funding for public schools.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, nonetheless, so, thus, well, while, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 6.10837438424 65% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 20.9802955665 76% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 31.9359605911 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1207.87684729 130% => OK
No of words: 276.0 242.827586207 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69565217391 5.00649968141 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32498955721 2.71678728327 122% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 139.433497537 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.695652173913 0.580463131201 120% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 379.143842365 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.6157635468 43% => OK
Article: 7.0 1.56157635468 448% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.9050440446 50.4703680194 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.909090909 104.977214359 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0909090909 20.9669160288 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 7.25397266985 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19835424362 0.242375264174 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064994293768 0.0925447433944 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362443570265 0.071462118173 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103143898978 0.151781067708 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346777127081 0.0609392437508 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 12.6369458128 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 53.1260098522 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.9458128079 141% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 11.5310837438 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.88 8.32886699507 131% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 55.0591133005 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.94827586207 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.5123152709 124% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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