Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your
own experiences, observations or reading.
Advertising is increasingly entering more and more personal areas of our lives. While public schools may benefit from additional revenue from advertising, there are negative implications that should be taken into consideration. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of advertising in schools and explain why it should not be used as a way to generate more revenue.
There are various reasons why public schools might use advertising to generate more revenues. For example, a school might be poor
and advertising might be the only option to make additional revenue. Many schools in poor areas do in fact use advertising to bolster their budgets. While advertising might be an easy option for schools to make money, they may want to consider other options.
There are various reasons why public schools should not use advertising to make more money. Academic integrity may be compromised by advertising in the school and as a result children may be exploited. It is well known that companies often target children in advertising campaigns that may not be ethical. The effect that advertising might have on children at schools may have negative consequences.
This essay discussed the reasons why schools may or may not use advertising to increase revenues. In my opinion, schools should refrain from advertising because academic integrity should be more important than making additional money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ues. For example, a school might be poor and advertising might be the only option...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
may, so, well, while, for example, in fact, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 6.10837438424 311% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 5.94088669951 67% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 20.9802955665 57% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 31.9359605911 72% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.75862068966 17% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1202.0 1207.87684729 100% => OK
No of words: 223.0 242.827586207 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39013452915 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.92707691288 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92285192982 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 139.433497537 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47533632287 0.580463131201 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 375.3 379.143842365 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5024630542 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.2126776217 50.4703680194 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.4615384615 104.977214359 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1538461538 20.9669160288 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.25397266985 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 6.9802955665 43% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 2.75862068966 254% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18271617563 0.242375264174 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885703708327 0.0925447433944 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030464928383 0.071462118173 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132893567533 0.151781067708 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284616935878 0.0609392437508 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 12.6369458128 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.1260098522 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.9458128079 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 11.5310837438 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32886699507 95% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 55.0591133005 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.94827586207 106% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.3980295567 85% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.