No doubt advertising is an essential part of a business. But, whether or not advertising in schools should be allowed has been a contested topic. In this essay, I will discuss why schools may choose to allow advertising targeted at their students, but overall, I will support my case that advertising in school should be discouraged.
Some schools that might be struggling financially may benefit from allowing advertisements to its pupils. Such income will bolster their budgets. For example, a school can use the money to build better infrastructure, or add resources such as books and lab equipment that children can immediately benefit from. In short, advertising can be a regular income stream for financially challenged schools, which ensures their sustenance.
On the other hand, it should not be forgotten that children are a vulnerable group that can be exploited. Unlike adults, children are very much a learning class that likely doesn't have the capacity to make informed decisions. For example, if there is an advertisement for sugary drinks targeted to them, they may easily get influenced towards the products. They may not have the ability to analyze whether it poses any health hazard to them. In short, businesses can lure children into using their products which may not actually be good for them.
To recapitulate, I discussed that some schools with financial troubles may find it necessary to allow advertising to students as a means to boost up their income. But, I strongly believe that, students can be easily exploited or ill-treated by corporate through advertising, so it should never be encouraged.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...s an essential part of a business. But, whether or not advertising in schools should be allowe...
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Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... very much a learning class that likely doesnt have the capacity to make informed deci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, may, so, for example, in short, no doubt, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 6.10837438424 327% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 20.9802955665 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 31.9359605911 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.75862068966 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1207.87684729 114% => OK
No of words: 263.0 242.827586207 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21673003802 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95678659985 2.71678728327 109% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 139.433497537 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600760456274 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 379.143842365 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8272417282 50.4703680194 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 104.977214359 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 20.9669160288 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 7.25397266985 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213400396695 0.242375264174 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759061558288 0.0925447433944 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422108902514 0.071462118173 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132633330178 0.151781067708 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191468362225 0.0609392437508 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 12.6369458128 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.1260098522 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 11.5310837438 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32886699507 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 55.0591133005 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.94827586207 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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