Some people think that technology improves the quality of life whereas others feel that creates new problems that threaten the quality of life. Discuss both these views and suggest your opinion?

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Some people think that technology improves the quality of life whereas others feel that creates new problems that threaten the quality of life. Discuss both these views and suggest your opinion?

These days, advancements and inventions are moving forward, and conspicuously have both positive and negative consequences on human life. While some groups tend to believe that these improvements bring comfort and quality to our life, opponents stand against them and think it is more harmful. I profoundly inclined to think that benefits of technology far outweigh its drawbacks. Following paragraphs will examine both sides by providing some academic evidence before concluding.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why I support improvements of the new technologies. Firstly, with regards to the advents of these days, our life has become more comfortable than before. Secondly, it brings us improvements in many fields such as medical, education, communication and security. According to an academic research conducted by Munich University of new science, after inventing of the computer and Internet, banking process has become much faster and safer, not to mention that it could lead to reducing traffic conjunctions and CO2 emission. Finally, high-tech advancements lead to make studies more interesting and bring intimacy for students.

On the other hands, every advancement has a negative side too. Opponents use a wide range of valid logic to prove side effects of the modernity towards us. Primarily, the improvements of atomic bomb bring deaths, not only to human but every kind of living things on the planet. Moreover, with vice versa using some global technologies, such as the Internet, terrorism could bring down the whole systems of vital facilities. According to National Security Community of Iran, hackers in 2015 caused more than 10 billion dollars’ financial loss for different corporations and infrastructures.

To recapitulate, I pen down saying that, new technology is like a two-edged sword and it depends on us how to use it, in a detrimental way or for bringing redemptions to our life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a detrimental way" with adverb for "detrimental"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ord and it depends on us how to use it, in a detrimental way or for bringing redemptions to our life...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, kind of, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.5418719212 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 6.10837438424 49% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 8.36945812808 167% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 5.94088669951 67% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 20.9802955665 110% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 31.9359605911 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1207.87684729 136% => OK
No of words: 302.0 242.827586207 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42052980132 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06265615525 2.71678728327 113% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 139.433497537 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64238410596 0.580463131201 111% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 379.143842365 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.65517241379 246% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6551724138 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9564617359 50.4703680194 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.133333333 104.977214359 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.9669160288 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.25397266985 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186295980681 0.242375264174 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569273235122 0.0925447433944 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558637334775 0.071462118173 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113527667972 0.151781067708 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810235812313 0.0609392437508 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 12.6369458128 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.1260098522 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.9458128079 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 11.5310837438 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.32886699507 116% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 55.0591133005 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.94827586207 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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