In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop you essay.
Generally speaking, people may have different opinion on why people living longer nowadays, but I think that the causes of the longevity of life of people can cause by the following reasons. I find that many clues or ideas for Living longer life are education; advancement in technology; and increasing access of health facilities.
To begin with, I think that life expectancy is increased because of education. Nowadays , along with increased population, educational status of people is upgraded.The main reason for this upgraded education is increasing awareness of people to it.As a result of it, literacy rate in the world is increasing tremendously as a indicator of increased education status.
In addition to education, I feel that invention of new things and technology has playing important role.Before the invention of these creative things, people have to apply tremendous efforts and energy to complete even small work but along with the invention of new technology, people have to expense less effort and power to do even big performance. Thus, technology helping people to save their energy and great effort for their better life.
Finally, in combination with education and exploration of new technology,I find that nowadays people living longer life due to being access of hospital in their local areas. When people get ill, they get immediate treatment for simple illness and due to technological innovation, it has been easy to find immediate treatment even for complicated issues like cancers and heart diseases. These new invention has helping a lot to save life and as a result has increased the life expectancy of people in the world.
In considering people and increased life expectancy, I have explored the issue of education; invention of new advanced technology; and increased access of health facilities.At last ,I would have to say that these are the key factors for living long life.
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