The reading passage says, humpback whales migrate long distances to find food, like as all animals in the world. So that’s mean they should know whatever they are going and they have never lost anymore. so the question is how they could do it? They maybe use navigating by the stars, like as human’s sailors, but the lecture ignores it, it’s not convincing, for example dogs are smart but they are in average of intelligent group, and most of their jobs are following their instinct.
First, humpback whales migrate in straight lines. Many birds and other terrestrial creatures, for example, use physical landmarks to help them stay on track as they migrate. Whales, which swim in the open ocean, cannot rely on land features; they could, however, rely on stars at night to provide them with external signs by which to maintain direction over long distances. But the lecture says, they able to do some external objects and the have magnetite and it make them sensitive migrate.
Second, they are sometimes observed floating straight up for minutes at a time, their heads above the water as though they were looking upward. The behavior is known as spy-hopping, and it is very rare among marine animals. One explanation for the function of spy-hopping is that the whales are looking at the stars, which are providing them with information to navigate by. But the lecture says, they couldn’t looking to stars because of their brain structure to hunting and swimming , so they couldn’t understanding the stars also, what happened in days without any stars in sky are they lost? Of course not, so it’s the biggest reason to reject the reading passage.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...going and they have never lost anymore. so the question is how they could do it? T...
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Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...l objects and the have magnetite and it make them sensitive migrate. Second, they...
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Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... brain structure to hunting and swimming , so they couldn't understanding the...
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Line 5, column 591, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...appened in days without any stars in sky are they lost? Of course not, so it&apos...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... reason to reject the reading passage.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, look, may, second, so, for example, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 280.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.025 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57944525479 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589285714286 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.955417681 49.2860985944 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.230769231 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 7.06452816374 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.553191335251 0.272083759551 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197561849791 0.0996497079465 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1108129908 0.0662205650399 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.39142631979 0.162205337803 241% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104484948503 0.0443174109184 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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