There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heared everywhere nowadays?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant ex

The debate whether or over the importance of music is an old one, with the attitude of people shifting throughout the debate over years.As contested by many this has sparked the heated debate , this issue is being regarded thoroughly positive and constructive by the number of people.Proponents and opponents make their cases to endorse their views on this contagious issue.In this essay , i will analyse this matter from both point of view and then draw a conclusion.In my opinion , the onus should be on the government.

To commence with, there are various arguments surrounding my viewpoint that music has been taking a auspicious place from the past history but the most important factor that needs to be considered relates to that now the past music is replaced by international music.Despite confront with plethora of new music , i still inculcated with traditional music.the traditional music has experience serenity, also mitigate the stress etc.As tangible example , the King of Mughal dynasty declared a fixed for music even they have their personal musician like the Taansen was the greatest musician of that time.In other words, the previous music has bombarded with emotions.

On the flip side , critics also believed that choices of the generation change with the time .They argued that international music like hip hop ,raps etc aggravate the activeness in the children.Although they have grown up with the evolution of new music , they are more connected with it.But it cannot also denied that new music have not printed its footprints to all , many of children still use to enjoy traditional music as it gives calm and peace.Those who advocate this viewpoint fail to see the picture in large context.

The other school of thoughts is either the music is old or new , everyone is being inspired with the songs.Everyone use to hear song in leisure time.

In the light of above discussion, it is fair and justifiable to say that as traditional music being so intrinsic, it cannot be replaced or ignored with the revolution.I am highly inclined with the notion of keep the music as holy as it was in previous time, so comparison is worthless.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.5418719212 180% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 6.10837438424 65% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 20.9802955665 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 31.9359605911 185% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1207.87684729 149% => OK
No of words: 356.0 242.827586207 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06460674157 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 3.92707691288 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89451244415 2.71678728327 107% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 139.433497537 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564606741573 0.580463131201 97% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 379.143842365 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.6157635468 195% => OK
Article: 6.0 1.56157635468 384% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.65517241379 219% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 12.6551724138 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 20.5024630542 346% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 185.956554066 50.4703680194 368% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 360.6 104.977214359 344% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.2 20.9669160288 340% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.2 7.25397266985 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.33497536946 525% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 6.9802955665 43% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283468169361 0.242375264174 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15768012378 0.0925447433944 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906281818376 0.071462118173 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15768012378 0.151781067708 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906281818376 0.0609392437508 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 38.0 12.6369458128 301% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -0.59 53.1260098522 -1% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.54236453202 223% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.0 10.9458128079 283% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.25 11.5310837438 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.24 8.32886699507 135% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 55.0591133005 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 9.94827586207 266% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.4 10.3980295567 292% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 10.5123152709 295% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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