The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result.
Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this recommendation letter, the board of directors of Monarch Books recommend to open a cafe in its store along with the books that will attract more customers. The conclusion that makes by the board of directors is flawed with some unwarranted assumptions. It fails to provide sufficient evidences in support of its claims. Unless providing enough authentic information to substantiate the assumptions made in this letter, recommendation is fallacious, and I am completely unconvinced.
To begin, the recommendation is largely dependent on the fallcious perception that what is effective for Regal Books to attract more customers is the same as what is effective for Monarch Books. However, there is no reliable previous statistics that can butress the above mentioned assumption. For instance, Regal Books may be situated in a remote place where there is no cafe, that is why Regal Books authority thinks that a cafe can more attact its customers so that they are not likely to get bored during their study hours. Conversely, Monarch Books may be placed in a centred location where other recreational things likecafe, restaurant and so on are here and there, so the readers mainly come here only to read actively and utilize their study hours. Furthermore, there is information about whether there is a proliferation of customers' frequency or not in Regal Books owing to the opening of a new cafe. Therefore, without having the answers of the above mentioned situations, the board of directors of Monarch Books should not surmise that a new cafe would increase the customers flow as well as should not recommend to its store to stall a new cafe.
Secondly, another unstated assumption that the board of directors of Monarch Books make is that they consider all the customers in a book shop have same characteristics,and they usually prefer a cafe shop inside their reading place. However, this is not necessarily be true. For instance, the majority readers of Monarchs Books are prefer a quite milieu in a reading place, and that is why they choose Monarch Books since there is no other obstacles that can a modicum of noise. If there is a cafe inside the store, the pellucidity of the store enviornment, at present which is conducive engough to study, would be noticebly dettered. As a result, the cusmosters of the Monarch Books will lose their interest to study here, and ultimately the rate of customers will go down. Moreover, there is authentic survey report that whether the customers are interested to have a cafe in their reading place or not. So, it is necessary to know the existing customer demands to decide to open a new cafe insidethe Monarch Books store, unless knowing the demand of customers, the claim remains unwarranted and open to debate.
To conclude, the above discussed reasons clearly mention that the recommendation is not based on enough authentic information and that is why it is flawed and unconvinced. Unless analyzing the unstated assumptions with substantial evidences, the Board of Directors of Monarch Books may be going to make a subversive descision by enjoining its stores to open a cafe.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: To begin, the recommendation is largely dependent on the fallcious perception that what is effective for Regal Books to attract more customers is the same as what is effective for Monarch Books.
Error: fallcious Suggestion: fallacious
Sentence: However, there is no reliable previous statistics that can butress the above mentioned assumption.
Error: butress Suggestion: buttress
Sentence: For instance, Regal Books may be situated in a remote place where there is no cafe, that is why Regal Books authority thinks that a cafe can more attact its customers so that they are not likely to get bored during their study hours.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: attact Suggestion: attack
Sentence: Conversely, Monarch Books may be placed in a centred location where other recreational things likecafe, restaurant and so on are here and there, so the readers mainly come here only to read actively and utilize their study hours.
Error: likecafe Suggestion: liberate
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: centred Suggestion: centered
Sentence: If there is a cafe inside the store, the pellucidity of the store enviornment, at present which is conducive engough to study, would be noticebly dettered.
Error: noticebly Suggestion: noticeably
Error: dettered Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: engough Suggestion: enough
Error: enviornment Suggestion: environment
Error: pellucidity Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As a result, the cusmosters of the Monarch Books will lose their interest to study here, and ultimately the rate of customers will go down.
Error: cusmosters Suggestion: customers
Sentence: So, it is necessary to know the existing customer demands to decide to open a new cafe insidethe Monarch Books store, unless knowing the demand of customers, the claim remains unwarranted and open to debate.
Error: insidethe Suggestion: inside
Error: unwarranted Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Unless analyzing the unstated assumptions with substantial evidences, the Board of Directors of Monarch Books may be going to make a subversive descision by enjoining its stores to open a cafe.
Error: descision Suggestion: decision
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- duplicated to argument 1
argument 3 -- ???
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minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 520 350
No. of Characters: 2563 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.775 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.929 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.82 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.327 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...in a book shop have same characteristics,and they usually prefer a cafe shop inside ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'preferred'.
Suggestion: preferred
... majority readers of Monarchs Books are prefer a quite milieu in a reading place, and ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 340, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('quite') instead an adjective, or a noun ('milieu') instead of another adjective.
...ty readers of Monarchs Books are prefer a quite milieu in a reading place, and that is why the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 339, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...make a subversive descision by enjoining its stores to open a cafe.
^^
Line 7, column 368, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y enjoining its stores to open a cafe.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2625.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 519.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05780346821 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92603315539 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429672447013 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 837.0 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8576976665 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.157894737 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3157894737 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357667127051 0.218282227539 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11365847581 0.0743258471296 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0913334785537 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238502062702 0.128457276422 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023129005976 0.0628817314937 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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