Military force is the backbone of any country. It decides how powerful the country is globally and how the country will behave in the state of war. Protection of a country is and should continue to be the most important factor of the country because if the country's military isn't strong, The country will fail to leave an impact on the other countries and terrorist groups and ultimately, will make that country gullible and thus concede in front of others. So I believe that the recommendation of investing in arts as much as military is an imprudent decision.
Financial decisions by a country's government are highly consequential. It decides the fate of the country along with it's position in the global economy. Decision making is an art and when it comes to a country's financial decisions, all the important factors including their pros and cons should be taken into consideration. Though investing in Art is important to make the people of the country aesthetic and beatified but investing as much as military is not a wise move. Investment decisions should be on the basis of the needs of the country and it is believed that a strong military is the need of the hour for every country in the world to make it's global position better and to leave a strong impact on other countries.
Let us take into consideration a county like Syria, which is in the middle of a terrible cataclysm. The country is fully dominated by the moribund terrorist group ISIS, It has made the life of the citizens a living inferno. There is no place of any Art left in the country and one of the sole reasons for this abysmal situation is Syria's week military force. Even with the help of so many ally countries, the Government is unable to curb the crisis, thousand of Syrian citizens are still being killed on daily basis and it's just getting worse.
So, It is a stated fact and a well scrutinised conclusion that the Investment in the military force is very essential for a country's safety and keeping that in mind, there will be no place for art if the country's military force isn't strong enough to keep the citizens safe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 374.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66310160428 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64022777634 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.7675061468 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.571428571 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7142857143 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.14285714286 5.21951772744 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101462863572 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467434756083 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355476082681 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0699464020395 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245017298004 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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