As far as I concern, I certainly agree with the purpose of education is to free our minds and spirits instead of restraining them. Of course, there are someone who asserts that the formal education would confine one's imagination or minds. To make it clear, I believe it will depends on the fields which you have learned when we discuss this controversial essay. As a luck dog, I will address my views with points below.
To begin with, this is not the first time when I as a Chinese student who suffered from our intensive studying for decades , which seems there is no obvious changes in the future in that there are too many students in our country, that means the competition will be still rigorous. For example there are over 40 thousand people take the GRE test annually, this number is just an Test which not so many chinese know, let alone our college entrance examination. What I give these examples all depict the serious competitions in China,almost everywhere.Due to the imbalance development of China, we have to compete with each other by exams, this means the unanimous education is significant to our country, we have no choice, this is relatively just for everyone in China. As we all know, Chinese educaiton is one of the most controversial educations in the world which inevitably restrain one's minds and spirits by exams.
However, there are still lots of talents and eminent students who enrolled in fantastic universities by this rigorous way in China, most of them made great contribution to either our homeland or broads. Here is another case of this essay that one should learn to adapt to the environment he live. Given the pressure of studying ,some of the students yield to the study while some of them find the way to master the courese they have to. After enrolling the Universities, there is another scene. The students under the guidance of tutors have to go on with themselves, this is the showtime of minds and spirits.So in China , the students have to go through a hadr course before they entering the universities, while this dose not mean they are restrained by the formal education, instead, with the basic knowledge they had learned in the schools, we are equiped with them to gain more knowldege. In this way, the formal education is argubly a key to high-education. In othet word, one can not learn the knowledeg in high-education institution without the formal education, ther are cohesive that they both play significant roles in different stages in the studying.
Finally, some courese will liberate our minds and spirits rather than confining them like English, some students failed in reciting englishi words, then they would not find the world out side our country is so glamorous. I still remember when I read" I have a dream" by Martin Luther King in English version for the first time, his advocative speech inspired not only the colored people but also every one in the world to fight for the rights of their own, with out learning English, I centainly could not know this speech at all.
In conclusion, I belive this essay depends on the stage where the students are. For the students who have not entered the universities, the formal would be some kind of restrain for them while they should make clear, they will be freed in minds and spirits by this way that the formal education proveided, it's hard, while lots of people as well as myself benefit from the formal education when we were young, that is the tool for us to be truly free.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: one's
...that the formal education would confine ones imagination or minds. To make it clear,...
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...ds. To make it clear, I believe it will depends on the fields which you have learned wh...
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...d to fight for the rights of their own, with out learning English, I centainly could not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, of course, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 33.0505617978 215% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2906.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 607.0 442.535393258 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78747940692 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96360453597 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63066589295 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 215.323595506 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481054365733 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 907.2 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 6.24550561798 320% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.298394641 60.3974514979 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.947368421 118.986275619 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9473684211 23.4991977007 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247740513274 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819806125082 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820201049034 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16099865665 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759998067716 0.0667264976115 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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