TPO-21- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, all kinds of graduate which study in their final season want to find a certain job that is attached to their profession. And they are dreamed for a success career in the future job. But they may confused and lead them to the question between the ability to relate well to people and studying hard in school, which is more important?

If you want a successful future job, the score in school is very important. Firstly, if the graduate study well, they may gain some scholarship. Secondly, a good grade will you the courage that will make you confident and keep you move on. Last but not lease, as the old saying goes “no pay, no pain.” Graduates must do their duty to receive success. Just as everyone knows only studying hard in school will get more opportunities which may lead to success.

On the contrary, the relationship with is important to graduate too. It shows the emotional quotient that you have. Everyone lives in a certain condition which people think highly of their ability to relate well to people. If you get this talent, it will not only gives you convenient when you deal with things that are related to people, but also gives you a chance to give out your ability and ideas which are in your mind. So on the other hand, this certain ability will help you with your study and at the same time help you to reach your goal.

In all, studying well is the first step in your road to success, but I strongly believe that the ability to relate well to people is more necessary for the graduates.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'will' requires base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...f you get this talent, it will not only gives you convenient when you deal with thing...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1264.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 277.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56317689531 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32488171833 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519855595668 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6186818287 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2857142857 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349791266665 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126578165591 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719998077025 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229757472298 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290150749355 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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