"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The prompt claims that it is through a sense of cooperation that a society can train its young people for a leadership role and not through competition. Agreeing to the point that cooperation is needed, but without the sense of competition, you cannot become a good leader. Thus, I mostly don't agree with this claim for the following reasons.
To begin with, a leader is someone to whom everyone else can look up to. He is supposed to be an exemplar. To be this good the person needs to have a sense of competition, as no one is born leader. He needs to have that fighting mentality to handle difficult situations and get his team out of it. For instance, players like Cristiano Ronaldo might have been just another footballer if it wasn't for his competitive nature as he pushes himself to the limit, trains the hardest and maintains his health even after how much he has won he still desires more, that sense of competition made him dominate football for more than a decade. When younger players join a team they look up to him wishing they can be half as good as him. The above example illustrates why competition is necessary for making a good leader.
In addition, the competition gives a motivation to grow and at the same time it creates fear to prevent you from doing any immoral thing. As in the case of politics, a ruling party leader is less likely to do any immoral thing, provided there is an opposition. Because he knows that if he does something which is not in the favor of the country, the opposing party will start creating an issue with it. But at the same time, it also motivates to do good things for the welfare of the people of a country, so that it will help that party to win in next elections.
However, cooperation is equally important as no leader can work without a team. A leader needs to know how to get the best out of every individual.
Concluding, I concur that although the sense of cooperation is one of the qualities which a leader should have, one can not exclude the sense of competition from it. Both are necessary for a leader to thrive in his job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, still, thus, for instance, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4908616188 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56026224635 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514360313316 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5989766001 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5555555556 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160527966085 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509421682264 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502418012987 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963638132468 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628524554321 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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