Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
The above topic presents two sides of a quandary that every student out of high school is struck with before entering college. Unarguably, it is one of the hardest decision making almost every human goes through in their life time especially for the ones caught between passion and success. Nevertheless, choosing one of them is inevitable and is incumbent upon each one of us. Personally, one motivated by strong passion should always prefer a field his/her interest to a field with wide job market.
It is important for one to work towards their own bright future. Choosing a career path is a complex decision to make. But when one can be certain that a particular field that offers promise for ineluctable success, why opt for a field that can’t guarantee growth unless you are amongst the top hundred specialists of that field? Before taking a leap into the next big stage of life, one needs to pause for a moment and consider the interests of people around. Respecting parents efforts in bringing us to a position where we’re now eligible to go to college is morally important. It is them without who we wouldn’t have been able to afford school, books, toys or extra-curricular tuitions of our interests(this statement is driven by personal experiences from my childhood). It is now our turn to pay tribute to our parents by making a choice that will promise them of our brighter future. So when it comes to the presented dilemma, the obvious choice might point to the field of study that has surfeit of jobs.
There is of course the question of passion. A student could be immensely passionate about a particular sport field. There are students who have been trained in a particular sport since their childhood. Such students have no lack for talent. Should such a student not follow his/her passion? Should a student oppress his acquired talent just because it does not guarantee success? The question can be translated to “Is the student determined enough to become one of the most cherished/applauded in that field?” There’s an apothegm, “where there is will, there is a way”. If the student has a strong will power, he/she could definitely work towards becoming their best version in that field. For such people, there are no obstacles.
Best examples of students who followed their passion are PV Sindhu, a badminton great and Serena Williams, a tennis champion. PV Sindhu, international badminton player who represents India almost in every badminton championship held, has been trained for it since she was as young as a first grade kid. Same goes for Serena Williams. When they started out they were still embryonic in their games. They must have had great determination to becomes world’s best at their games. Indisputably, they have amazing careers that pay huge sums incomparable to routine jobs. Such examples do prove that going after passion also holds a bright future, probably brighter than the mundane jobs that masses go for.
In conclusion, choosing a career path that has greater scope for jobs may seem convenient for it is less stressful and saves us and the people entrusting us with the decision making from anticipating what our future beholds. However, if the student is confident enough to succeed in an unconventional field, he/she must work relentlessly towards his/her goal. Honestly, it is important to not regret the decisions we make especially long-term ones like this.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...lmost every human goes through in their life time especially for the ones caught between ...
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Line 3, column 1010, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'surfeited'.
Suggestion: surfeited
...ht point to the field of study that has surfeit of jobs. There is of course the ques...
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Line 7, column 335, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ade kid. Same goes for Serena Williams. When they started out they were still embryo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, honestly, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2891.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 572.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0541958042 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82796189034 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527972027972 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 874.8 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.5934322781 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2580645161 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4516129032 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.06451612903 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254903826281 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646723849271 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572438317353 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137721093972 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574705633791 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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