The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper."In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by

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The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.
"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The article states that in order to stimlate the city's economy, Dillton's city council lowered the corporate tax rate by 15 percent and offered relocation grants to the company would move to Dillton. The author considers the policy works and points out that the increase of two factories and more than 1000 employees in the factories are conspicuous evidences. The reasons sound sensible at first, unconvincing points, however, come out by cautious peruse.
Firstly, the editor states that two factories moving to the city means activation of economy. We should ask that what kind of resources the factories are seeking for. Perhaps the factories are seeking for a good location instead of the grants to set their factories. It is also possible that there are some resources that the factories use to produce their products. Investigating more about the purpose of the moved fatories is helpful to assure the validity of the assumption.
Secondly, even though these people are not local residents, more than 1000 employees in the factories does matter. If the employees are from Dillton, the argument is cogent. The out-of-town workers are not representative of the stimulated economy. Instead, this might represent that fewer and fewer people are willing to work locally. On the other hand, the salary for every worker are questionable. If their salary is lower than average, maybe the economy recessed. Therefore, one is sure that the policy works only when more detail of employees are provided.
Finally, the article is lacking of other possible factors. Possitive factors, such as the city has other policies which attracts factories to come. The better transportation systems and lower cost are both possible. On the contrary, potential negative facotrs also exist. Many people don't want to work locally so that few workers are in the local factories. The city has bad security leading to few factories and few residents. With more carefully thinking for the assumption, the evaluation of the policy will be reasonable.
In conclusion, the policy is attractive to many companies. However, the way the council assesses the strategy have to be more profound. To be profound, the way they do should focus on deeper information such as why the factories moved and why no residents work here rather than on the superficial evidences.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 361, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he factories are conspicuous evidences. The reasons sound sensible at first, unconv...
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Line 2, column 336, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...e are some resources that the factories use to produce their products. Investigatin...
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Line 4, column 284, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...egative facotrs also exist. Many people dont want to work locally so that few worker...
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Line 4, column 392, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...ries. The city has bad security leading to few factories and few residents. With m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 379.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16886543536 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.716958175 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538258575198 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5797695327 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.36 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.16 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.96 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126546213615 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0344203704242 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719897242748 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.075001533624 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710763651907 0.0628817314937 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 380 350
No. of Characters: 1909 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.415 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.024 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.599 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.158 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.267 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.267 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5