The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.
"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The argument here is from an article of Dillton newspaper. it talks about the reforms the city council had taken to stimulate the economy and its effects. All the council members decided that they would reduce the corporate tax by 15% and they would offer generous relocation grants to any company that would move to dilliton. However the opening of two factories in dilliton did not have any impact on the unemployment rate to which the passage concludes that the employment is being given to out of town workers.
In the passage it is given that the factories employ more than 1000 people but still the unemployment rate did not change. There might be a chance that the citizens who had left the town came back because of the news due to which the population of the unemployed increased. In spite of the factories taking many people as their employees the rate of unemployed would be the same.
The actions were implemented to increase their economy but they did not mention the after effects of their reforms on the economy rate. What had happened to the economy rate? How much did it increase by?
The passage doesnt even mention about the population demographics were the majority of population young or old. may be the factories wanted young people and this town did not have enough of them or may be more women. The people required depends on the factory that has been established and no information was provided about the factories that were built.
The argument here is flawed and would have been more cogent if they had mentioned about the population demographics, the type of factories built, the effect of their policies on economy rate .
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 286 350
No. of Characters: 1343 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.112 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.696 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.441 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 86 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.299 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.667 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 60, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...s from an article of Dillton newspaper. it talks about the reforms the city counci...
^^
Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ny company that would move to dilliton. However the opening of two factories in dillito...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 495, Rule ID: OUT_OF_PLACE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'out-of-town'?
Suggestion: out-of-town
...s that the employment is being given to out of town workers. In the passage it is give...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 13, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...h did it increase by? The passage doesnt even mention about the population demog...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 113, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
...he majority of population young or old. may be the factories wanted young people an...
^^^
Line 17, column 191, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...effect of their policies on economy rate .
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, still, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 286.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83916083916 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48157018466 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503496503497 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1013632963 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8571428571 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92857142857 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0790737132916 0.218282227539 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366997737816 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623192276723 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0433926745007 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586351767643 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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