The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.
"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
In this passage, we are informed that the unemployment rate in Dillton remains stable, despite of increasing employed people in two new factories. Referring to such situation, the author attributes the unchanged unemployment rate to the fact that two factories hired out-of-town employees instead of local colleagues. Quite convincing though such explanation appears at first glance, we can not safely claim that it is the unique one that accounts for the facts presented in the argument. Therefore, we need to consider more reasons , which could rival with the one presented in the passage.
To start off, we need to clarify with the definition of unemployment rate, which equates with unemployment number of population divide the total population in Dillton city. Thus, based on factors relevant with equation, there exists several possible situations, which could lead to the constant unemployment rate.
First of all, while 1,000 peoples have been hired by two new factories, it doesn't mean that the employment population will definitely increase. Instead, it is likely that the unemployment total number could keep as before.For example, two new factories just hired the people who already owned a suitable local job position. If it is the case, unemployment number of population doesn't change, because there exist only exchange between employed workers. Consequently, the constant unemployment rate could be explained as originating from non-changed number of unemployed people in local.
Furthermore, considering factors in rate equation, the changes of total population number could exert influence on the final unemployment rate. However, the author seems only consider that increasing employment will lead to the inevitable decrease of unemployment population, but also ignore that facts that unemployment population could also be affected by many reasons. Thus, one possible reason accounting for the fact could be that unemployment population also increase dramatically, when hired people of two new factories raise up. The possible reason is that the new jobs provide by those two factories incur fierce market competition, which leads to more people's leave from their original job position.
Last but not least, even if we supposed that employment population has been increased by more hires from these two factories, other explanations could also compete with the one alleged in the argument. For instance, the total population number has also raised up from other reasonable cause, such as more teenage employment enter the new market after graduation. Under such as, instead of employed number increase, the denominator in the equation also become larger, which definitely offset the increasing trend caused by the employment effect by those two factories. If this is true, constant rate could be understandable.
In summary, while employment population number have exerted great influence on the final unemployment rate, in the absence of sufficient information, we can not establish a casual relationship between it and the hiring choices of two new factories for local resident. The constant unemployment rate is such a case that we should consider more explanations which could account for the facts mentioned in the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 501 350
No. of Characters: 2688 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.731 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.365 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.861 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 155 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 84 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.801 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.189 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: doesn't
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Suggestion: For
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...case, unemployment number of population doesnt change, because there exist only exchan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in summary, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 49.0 16.3942115768 299% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2777.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 498.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57630522088 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94870967977 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449799196787 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 854.1 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5980217441 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.85 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0530172816663 0.218282227539 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0233120397828 0.0743258471296 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0222641865837 0.0701772020484 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0366930797492 0.128457276422 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0128157336706 0.0628817314937 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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