The following appeared in a memorandum from the planning department of an electric power company.
"Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy. At the same time, manufacturers are now marketing many home appliances, such as refrigerators and air conditioners, that are almost twice as energy efficient as those sold a decade ago. Also, new technologies for better home insulation and passive solar heating are readily available to reduce the energy needed for home heating. Therefore, the total demand for electricity in our area will not increase - and may decline slightly. Since our three electric generating plants in operation for the past twenty years have always met our needs, construction of new generating plants will not be necessary.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The writer of this argument concludes that there is no specific need to increase the number of electrical equipment’s for impending future, due to the obvious results of a survey, and also recent progresses in electrical power industry; however, this conclusion cannot be accepted as it is in that it rests on a number of assumptions all of which can be challenged in one way or another.
The first problem with the argument is that the writer assumes that the outcome of the surveys can be entirely accurate, however, it is evident that there are some of the people who do not really pay adequate attention to these questionnaires’, since they might have this attitude that their ideas can not gain sufficient support from the government. Or maybe they may not answer to the mentioned questions candidly, so that may bring about decisions which are not really fruitful for the future of the both dwellers and of course the society.
The other problem with this conclusion is that the writer assumes that the things remain the same over the years, however it is transparent that suitable amount of equipments and facilities can cause the raise in the number of residences of a specific place such as a large city. In the other word, nowadays we can see a high number of immigrants from suburban areas who are willing to move to big provinces in orther to enhance the quality of their life, and make a better future for their oofsprings. The result of this phenomenon have many undeniable effects on the consumption of electrical power.
The third problem is that the writer would have us believe that novel inventions by human have always this feature to be efficient enough, although it is vivid that for manufacturing these kind of sophisticated technologies the first priority is electrical consumption. There for, the companies and factories demand high amount of electrical energy in order to supply the need of the people. In addition to this problem, the prices can be sometimes outrageous, as many people do not have this ability to utilize these devices in their homes , and that is only appropriate for some parts of the society who can afford high prices.
In brief, the conclusion cannot be taken to be correct, since, as it was shown in body paragraphs above, it depends on a number of assumptions each of which is questionable. The conclusion can only be accepted if the weaknesses already referred to are all removed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 416 350
No. of Characters: 1980 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.516 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.76 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.667 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.112 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.671 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 121, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of the surveys can be entirely accurate, however, it is evident that there are so...
^^
Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... however, it is evident that there are some of the people who do not really pay adequate a...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ough it is vivid that for manufacturing these kind of sophisticated technologies the first...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 540, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... to utilize these devices in their homes , and that is only appropriate for some p...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, really, so, third, well, in addition, in brief, kind of, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88461538462 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84680055778 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492788461538 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.784749619 57.8364921388 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 184.727272727 119.503703932 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.8181818182 23.324526521 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63636363636 5.70786347227 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0682962945991 0.218282227539 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0276581397176 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0231179320723 0.0701772020484 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0387461401072 0.128457276422 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248539574771 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 14.3799401198 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 48.3550499002 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.197005988 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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