Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school.
• It has been disputing for long time which has more important influence classmates or parents. It leads us to wonder which one is more prominence. I hold the belief that classmates play an essential role than parents.
• To begin with, the moderate competing with associates hugely stimulate child’s ambition. For example, when I was in 7th grade, I didn’t do well in math in the beginning, as I thought all those formulas really intricate for me. In addition, I always scored low compared with my peers, and so further I felt very stressful. However, under such peer pressure, my score gradually increased, because I studied harder and tried to surpass my friends. This moderate competition actually helped me make much progress in my math. At the end, I graduated by best math grade in my class. From this experience, I really think that moderate competition can bring positive impact on a child’s success at school.
• The cooperating with friends would induce new ideas we never though before. Sometime teachers assigned so difficult homework that a student can’t figure out by one’s own. Yet two heads are better than one. If children work with friends, then it would take less time to complete the homework. To illustrate, when I was a 5th grade, immense homework such as math and science bombarded me. Although the questions of every subject were a few, they are extremely abstract and intricate. Spending more than 20 hours for a homework does not guarantee students to dig up a feasible approach. In order to deal with the assignments, my classmates and I teamwork to brainstorm. In my experience, although no one is capable to offer a workable answer, everyone would provide some partial results. By combining all the partial results, usually the solution would appear.
• The friendship motivates students to achieve outstanding performance. As a high school student, I was fond of studying science. What entertains me more is discussing science with friends. Joy shared with others are more enjoyed. Regularly, we discuss plentiful problem varying from geology to astronomy. Not only had we a cheerful time but also learned a lot. In the time, I build a stronger foundation in scientific knowledge and understanding.
• In conclusion, I think classmates have more influence on child’s success in school. Not only because moderate competition with classmates bring positive impact but because they can work together.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...er which one is more prominence. I hold the believe that classmates play a more essential r...
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Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...hich one is more prominence. I hold the believe that classmates play a more essential r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1074.0 1977.66487455 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 212.0 407.700716846 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06603773585 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 4.48103885553 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87132060594 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.650943396226 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 327.6 618.680645161 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.4263157471 48.9658058833 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.125 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.25 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207155999464 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067721701783 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989359185911 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170758971727 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130623713712 0.0645574589148 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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