The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The line graph illustrates how many enquiries (in person, by letter/email and by telephone) the Tourist information office in a certain city received between January and June in 2011.

Overall, it can be clearly observed that while “in person” and “by telephone” enquiries received had an upward trend, the reverse was true for those received by letter/email. Though, least number of enquiries were received in person in January, however, at the end it became the highest number received.

At the beginning of the period, about 900 queries were welcomed by telephone which is followed by a slight decline of 100 in Feb., however, the figure rose considerably and remained stable in Mar and Apr at 1000 before significantly rising to 1600 at the end of the period. Whereas, in Jan, just over 400 were received, this number increased steadily to 800 in Mar, afterwards, it grew drastically to overtake ‘by telephone’ enquiries received, reaching its highest level in June at about 1900.

In contrast, the number received by letter/email began the period at just under 800, and dropped marginally and remained unchanged in Feb and Mar at 700. Thereafter, it saw a considerable drop to just below 400 and plateaued till the end of the period.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1072.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20388349515 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01790303231 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592233009709 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 328.5 283.868780488 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.0455354227 43.030603864 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.142857143 112.824112599 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4285714286 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.23603664747 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220834166494 0.215688989381 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111249825547 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789365924143 0.0843802449381 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150195245246 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835134655408 0.0819641961636 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.2329268293 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 61.2550243902 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.3012195122 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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