Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass window

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Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows. There are, however, several solutions that responsible businesses can use to prevent injuries to birds.

One-Way Glass

One solution is to replace the regular, clear glass with one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction. The occupants of the building can see out, but birds and others cannot see in. If birds cannot see through a window, they will understand that the glass forms a solid barrier and will not try to fly through it.

Colorful Designs

A second solution is to paint colorful lines or other designs on regular window glass. For example, a window could have a design of thin stripes painted over the glass. People would still be able to see through the openings in the design where there is no paint, while birds would see the stripes and thus avoid trying to fly through the glass. Architects can be encouraged to include colorful painted patterns on glass as part of the general design of buildings.

Magnetic Field

The third solution is to create an artificial magnetic field to guide birds away from buildings. Humans use an instrument called a magnetic compass to determine directions—either north, south, east, or west. Bird research has shown that birds have a natural ability to sense Earth’s magnetic fields; this ability works just like a compass, and it helps birds navigate in the right direction when they fly. A building in a bird flight path can be equipped with powerful electromagnets that emit magnetic signals that steer birds in a direction away from the building.

The passage in the reading talks about the injuries of wild brids caused by glasses in the buildings and presents three ways to solve this. The lecturer, however, refutes these solutions by stating them to be ineffective.

Firstly, the reading proposes to use one-way glass in the buildings, so that the bird will not see through them and will perceive it as a solid barrier and will avoid it. But, the lecturer points out that the one-way glass is just as bad as the regular glass as the one-way glass acts as a mirror. If the birds see the reflection of sky or a tree on the one-way glass they will perceive it as the open air and will try to fly through it. So, this solution will not work.

Secondly, the passage suggests to paint the glass windows with stripes. The birds will then avoid flying through by seeing the stripes. The lecturer, however, rebuts this idea by stating that the birds will consider the unpainted portion of the glass to be holes or openings, which will lead them to try to fly through them. To prevent this, the unpainted portions of the glasses need to be very small. But, this will make the interior of the building darker as there will less light passing through the small openings.

Finally, the passage posits to create and use artificial magnetic field to steer away the birds from the path of the building. This idea is based on the knowledge that birds use earth's magnetic field to navigate. Although, the lecturer agrees with the passage that birds use earth's magnetic field to navigate, he added that bidrs use this navigation technique only while the are migrating from one country to another. They don't use the magnetic field to navigate for shorter routes like moving from one end of the city to another end. In addition, he said that, for this shorter distances birds depends on their eyes and the brightness of the light. So, this solution will not be effective too.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 460, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ake the interior of the building darker as there will less light passing through t...
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Line 13, column 372, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...se this navigation technique only while the are migrating from one country to another. ...
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Line 13, column 424, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ating from one country to another. They dont use the magnetic field to navigate for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 30.3222958057 162% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 340.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66470588235 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25620252349 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482352941176 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9674848877 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2941176471 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 7.06452816374 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202531004524 0.272083759551 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737475788734 0.0996497079465 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619001937192 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124412907146 0.162205337803 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052785388674 0.0443174109184 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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