By and large, people's mind have been always preoccupied with questions regarding how to build a better future. Vocations one may get have been always considered as a paramount element in paving the way for a prosper future. There are a plethora of people who are in the conviction that nowadays its much more easier to find a career that would provide them with a secure and prosper future , while others take a radically different point of view and assert that finding a job that would lead to a successful future was easier in the past. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned, I accord with the first group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my point of view, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, in the modern society that we live, the avenues of communication have been broaden substantially, comparing to the past and thereby Exploiting others experience in order to find the best career have become much more convenient. The prevalence of Internet over the new era as a way of communication has helped many through giving them access to successful Entrepreneurship from all around the world. For example, I was able to find the career that turned around my lifestyle through watching Gary Wines videos. Gary is a well-known social media expert and has helped many, to find their way through the vicissitudes of life. Not only does he provide people, from all around the world, with general business advices, but he also gives them tailored advices regarding how to find the career that can bring about successfulness into their lives.
Secondly, people are more literate nowadays than they were in the past. As a result they are better equipped since knowledge can affect people's sense of judgment in a positive course and enables them to recognize the consequences of their career choices more vividly. As an example of what people in the past would base their decision on, take my 80 year old uncle. With minimum literacy knowledge, he had spent most of his life in the ranch that had inherited from his father. He persistently wanted to convince his son into persuading the family business which was farming. Believing that one can achieve great fortune through farming, he was determined to force his son into being a farmer. "This is the only way to a better future" he would always say, little he knew, his son followed the path of his brother and became a very successful doctor.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons and explanations leads to the conclusion that people can find the career that leads them to a better future more easily than people of the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have always been
By and large, peoples mind have been always preoccupied with questions regarding ho...
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Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have always been
... a better future. Vocations one may get have been always considered as a paramount element in pa...
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Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...paramount element in paving the way for a prosper future. There are a plethora of people ...
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Line 1, column 305, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...n the conviction that nowadays its much more easier to find a career that would provide the...
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Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...de them with a secure and prosper future , while others take a radically different...
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Line 2, column 85, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'broadened'.
Suggestion: broadened
... the avenues of communication have been broaden substantially, comparing to the past an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in short, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87252747253 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68685280883 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512087912088 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.0568698676 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.166666667 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2777777778 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166622816033 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505009351252 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451218359601 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108976514269 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367182291772 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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