Some people believe that museum should introduce the culture and civilization of their own country, while some others believe that museum should represent the culture and civilization of all nations. Which side do you agree with express your reason?
Today, there are many museums in some big and modern countries where many various cultures and civilizations in them. And, These places could be divided three parts, the first is that they have their own cultures or nations, the second is that these environments have only all of world's nations civilizations, and the last one is that they have both of these types which have the first and the second parts. I think Which one should be used it depend's on their people's tendencies.
First of all, all countries have their own histories, and these countries histories consist of numerous events such as wars, evaluations, races, etc. Almost all of these issues lasted long or short but some of them affected mostly than the others. And, some parts of these things impact their residents positively. For example, the bad event is war which occurred by two different countries or cities. In these battles there would be several injuries or crashes which influence people of these countries of cities. Then, these bad events always showed which places, people, or countries good or bad. For that, people construct their places with their own cultural events in their future plans.
Also, in some cultures there would be the good activities and explorations. And these facilities usually lead their followers well. A member of these cultures are more lucky than the others, because their own history provided productive events to them, they would learn more information from these findings than the other cultures. And, these cultures would spread to all over the world. Although, all of these countries have their own cultures they could use other cultures' customs for their improvements. For instance, the renaissance is the powerful event in the history, because it affected people's thoughts and abilities. And, that changed several countries approaches on their human. So, that historical situation used in so many museums.
In conclusion, taking account of all reason, countries use neither their own cultures nor other cultures. I think they should use both of these cultures regulary, clearly.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20588235294 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5006158411 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497058823529 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.0984573287 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239947812791 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866782147051 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589289063188 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174450326421 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236647230836 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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