An ancient, traditional remedy for insomnia — the scent of lavender flowers — has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored electronically. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. At the beginning of the second week, the volunteers discontinued their sleeping medication. During that week, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. Therefore, the study proves that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.
The author concludes that lavender cures insomnia within short period of time, the argument fails to mention several key factors, reveals several instances of poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology and distorts the view of the situation by manipulating facts and by providing weak evidences. To support the conclusion, the author reasons that lavender cures insomnia within short time. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the authors conclusion. Hence, the argument seems in complete or unsubstantiated.
Firstly, where all 30 volunteers that were tested with lavender-scented pillows had same medical condition other than insomnia and had same work conditions? This is mere assumption made without much solid ground. The argument would have been convincing if it explicitly stated that all 30 volunteer that were tested had same medical condition. The work stress can be one of the reason for insomnia.
The argument also futher claims that the volunteer were able to improve on their sleep issues after stopping to take their usual pills. However, author fails to prove that the improvement was due to lavender. The improvement can be due to any other reason like changes in surronding or changes their daily actiivity. If the author would had given any evidence about their daily activities than the argument would had been more convencing.
The author further claims that during thirds week of study the volunteer were able to sleep longer and more soundly than previous two weeks.The author did not prove that during third week improved results were due to laveder scented pillow.Rather it would be because of change if habit of volunteer of taking pills due to sleep because author states that the vounteer were able to sleep during first week when they were taking pills but they did not sleep well in second week.This statement of author can create flaw in observation of study in third week.
In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster if further, the author must provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by a way of reliable detailed analysis that lavender helps to cure insomnia in short period.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 357 350
No. of Characters: 1817 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.09 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.503 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.312 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.101 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cures'' or 'cure's'?
Suggestion: cures'; cure's
The author concludes that lavender cures insomnia within short period of time, t...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...at lavender cures insomnia within short period of time, the argument fails to mention several ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ak evidences. To support the conclusion, the author reasons that lavender cures ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... To support the conclusion, the author reasons that lavender cures insomnia wit...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cures'' or 'cure's'?
Suggestion: cures'; cure's
...ion, the author reasons that lavender cures insomnia within short time. However, ca...
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Line 1, column 492, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rovides little credible support for the authors conclusion. Hence, the argument seems i...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...seems in complete or unsubstantiated. Firstly, where all 30 volunteers that we...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...an be one of the reason for insomnia. The argument also futher claims that the...
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Line 5, column 3, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... be one of the reason for insomnia. The argument also futher claims that the vo...
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Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nding or changes their daily actiivity. If the author would had given any evidence...
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Line 5, column 340, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...ir daily actiivity. If the author would had given any evidence about their daily ac...
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Line 5, column 416, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...aily activities than the argument would had been more convencing. The author furt...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...nd more soundly than previous two weeks.The author did not prove that during third ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Rather
...ults were due to laveder scented pillow.Rather it would be because of change if habit ...
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Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...ults were due to laveder scented pillow.Rather it would be because of change if habit ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... they did not sleep well in second week.This statement of author can create flaw in ...
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Suggestion:
...n observation of study in third week. In conclusion, the authors argument is u...
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Line 9, column 23, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... in third week. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, so, third, well, in conclusion, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25423728814 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64100122765 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516949152542 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 124.583822742 57.8364921388 215% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 124.0 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164927199735 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557684012356 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558675160165 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919733627744 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563494852351 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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