Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young
children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education is essential for the future generation and for developing a successful life. Parents, the government spends a lot of money on the young child to have a better carrier. However, some people think that investing more money for young children (five to ten years old) is essential than a university student. However, others hold the opposite view that the university should deserve more invest because of their new innovative work. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelming. Among the two options, I agree with the first statement. There are several reasons for this which I will elaborate in followings.
First and foremost, the university should spend a lot of money on talented students who cannot afford their own tuition. some of the talented students in the university leave their study because of the tuition fees. If the government take care of them they can shine in the future. One of the friends who are very brilliant in studying but at the university, he was not able to afford the tuition fees. so, he had to leave the university. Moreover, some student develope innovative project which may beneficial for the environment, technology, industry but lack of proper investment most of the project could not possible to develop a high level. For example, in my university one group of student invent robot which can detect the people's voice and can transfer the voice to the host network. This project was appreciated by the dean and many professors. But, to develop the project required more investment which was difficult and the developer of the project trying hard to find an investor. Finally, the project was postponed due to the lack of money.
Furthermore, for advanced education in the university government should spend more money on the equipment of the laboratory. For some course some equipment is traditional and for better understanding advance equipment is needed. For instance, when I was an undergrad student I had a course on a machine and for better understanding different kinds of machine is required like generator, dc alternator, ac alternator etc. But, in our lab we only have one type of machine but which is very old. So, I studied hard to realize the mechanism of all the machine but it was difficult for me without watching the parts of the machine. Thus, if the government budget is good universty can buy that equipment.
To recapitulate, government should consider those fact that I discuss above because student is our future. They can change the world with their new innvention and technology. If goverment support student, they can easily improve the society and can make the society more better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 416, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'innovative'.
Suggestion: innovative
...ld deserve more invest because of their new innovative work. Not surprisingly, the number of c...
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Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...ts who cannot afford their own tuition. some of the talented students in the univers...
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Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ts who cannot afford their own tuition. some of the talented students in the university lea...
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Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...heir study because of the tuition fees. If the government take care of them they c...
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Line 5, column 404, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...as not able to afford the tuition fees. so, he had to leave the university. Moreov...
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Line 13, column 45, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this fact' or 'those facts'?
Suggestion: this fact; those facts
...ecapitulate, government should consider those fact that I discuss above because student is...
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Line 13, column 267, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...ve the society and can make the society more better.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04932735426 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81331082007 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495515695067 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 714.6 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2567940534 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6153846154 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1538461538 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73076923077 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278116398944 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753458792317 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839315505354 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175656438984 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122347543043 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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