The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where r

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Given Bar Graph demonstrate the number of trips made by off springs in one country and utilize various modes of transport from home to school. The year begin from 1990 and end at 2010.

First of all, in 1990, children used car about 4 millions and in 2010 car passenger hit the highest level about 11 millions approximately. In 1990, walking passengers hit highest level in walking and in 2010 they decreased to six million. In Cycling in 1990 six million passengers prefer cycling for travelling and in 2010 demand of cycling decreased to 2 million.

In 1990, off springs prefer walking and bus about six million approximately and in 2010 the demand of both walking and bus decreased to 3 million Therefore children prefer bus to travel for trip about 7 million and in 2010 it decreased to 5 million

Overall, car passenger hit the maximum level and walking passenger great in numbers and cycling passenger hit the lowest level .

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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The Given Bar Graph demonstrate the number of trip...
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...ar Graph demonstrate the number of trips made by off springs in one country and u...
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...roximately. In 1990, walking passengers hit highest level in walking and in 2010 they decre...
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...eased to six million. In Cycling in 1990 six million passengers prefer cycling fo...
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...passengers prefer cycling for travelling and in 2010 demand of cycling decreased ...
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...of cycling decreased to 2 million. In 1990, off springs prefer walking and bu...
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...and bus decreased to 3 million Therefore children prefer bus to travel for trip ...
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...Therefore children prefer bus to travel for trip about 7 million and in 2010 it ...
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...and in 2010 it decreased to 5 million Overall, car passenger hit the maximum ...
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...it decreased to 5 million Overall, car passenger hit the maximum level and ...
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...d cycling passenger hit the lowest level .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, therefore, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.0 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85802469136 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58240673984 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 75.0 106.607317073 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462962962963 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.475419643 43.030603864 252% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 131.166666667 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170137774294 0.215688989381 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112704160173 0.103423049105 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699202065405 0.0843802449381 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122746309774 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101777576309 0.0819641961636 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.45 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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