Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although many parents consider that part-time jobs make teenagers unfocused on their studying, I believe that one of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. The reason is that part-time jobs can benefit young people on communicating with others. Also, part-time jobs can increase their working experience. Thus, I agree with the statement that parents can encourage their children to take a part-time job.
To begin with, part-time jobs can help youngsters be good at communicating with people. As a matter of fact, young people usually spend most of time concentrating on studying academic issues and getting outstanding grades in school, so most of them have no idea how to associate well with others. On the other hand, part-time job provides a more complex environment than school's for youngsters to learn how to cooperate with people coming from different background. After all, part-time job is full-time job in miniature, so part-time job is a nice first step for the youths to start with.
In addition, accumulating working experience is another advantage since most of the companies emphasize on hiring experienced workers instead of good grades students. In fact, having a relating experience can help graduating students have giant chances to receive a well-paid job. Take my country, Taiwan, for instance, according to the graduating report in 2018, it indicates that more than ninety percent high-paid students have two or three relating part-time job experiences. Therefore, to prepare for adult life, it is better for the youths to start a part-time job in early stage.
In conclusion, based on above reasons, I strongly support that part-time job is one of best way for the youths to prepare for their future life. That is to say, by considering a successful adult life, parents should encourage their teenage children to take part-time job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to graduate' or 'graduate'.
Suggestion: to graduate; graduate
..., having a relating experience can help graduating students have giant chances to receive ...
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Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
...ongly support that part-time job is one of best way for the youths to prepare for their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, therefore, thus, well, after all, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, to begin with, to start with, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17721518987 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79353315921 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509493670886 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9455992372 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.857142857 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5714285714 5.45110844103 249% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471827425228 0.236089414692 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.207528899534 0.076458572812 271% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143301071389 0.0737576698707 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338869003346 0.150856017488 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158006954651 0.0645574589148 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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