People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterward are poor decision-makers.
Those who can control their emotions and make a decision without considering their emotions can make significant progress in their life. Our decision should not reflect our emotions rather it should reflect our confidence and character. The decision led by emotion often brings the risk of failure. And it can be inferred that those who can try to justify their logic afterward are poor decision-makers since there is no scope of doing this. So, I am in agreement with the author's presentation regarding the matters of decision.
Let's take an example of great personalities like Albert Einstein, Mark Zuckerberg, Bill Gates, etc. Albert Einstein was deeply interested in quantum physics. Although his parents want him to do some jobs, he did not listen and made a wise decision to pursue his dream. As a result of this, he became able to give birth to "Theory Of Relativity", " Phenomena of Light" and soon. He is now called "Father of Physics". Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg are colleges dropout. They like to do something in their life that was the out of syllabus of their college and hence they left college and pursue their dream by making wise decisions. As a result, one becomes the "Founder of Microsoft" and another becomes the "Founder of "Facebook". From this, it can be obvious that a wise decision-maker can progress a lot in the context of getting success in their chosen fields.
There is numerous scenario of getting failure due to unwise decision that retaken based on emotion. Let's taken an example of the privilege "Dowry System" of Nepal. The bridegroom demands lots of dowry in marriage and if they failed to provide enough dowry then the bride would become the victim of mental and physical torture. As a result, it would discard the virtue of humanity and their prestige. let's take another example of a person who had gone through recent heartbreak. In this case, if he/she made a decision, it would often be a poor decision because it is led by his/her emotion not based on the ability to judge right or wrong. Hence, he could become the victimize of his/her own decision.
In fact, we need to keep our emotions aside while making certain decisions. There might be some cases where decisions need to take based on the emotion however every time if we preferred our emotion for making each and every decision without taking consideration of needs and demands, it would become a catastrophe. Our decision should reflect our character, our boldness and or confidence else you are considered as poor decision-makers. And it would be an injustice to support your decision that was already failed based on your own logic. So, to become a wise decision-maker, let's keep our emotions aside and focus on the will that we really want. This would be the foundation of our target success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, really, regarding, so, then, while, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2402.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00416666667 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95362301062 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502083333333 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6274916159 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.962962963 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81481481481 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327497766544 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848388051604 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936166123551 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216103697308 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129770096634 0.0667264976115 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.