When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices. Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details.
Nowayads, there is a big challenge between companies around the world to catch the eyes of the customers to buy clothes manufactured by one brand. Consequently, dressing is a vital part of every culture and many people wants to follow the fashion rules of the region that they live in. On the other hand, some people do not waste their time on something like fashion and always buy and wear the same type of clothes. I prefer to change my customs in each new situation, depends on the money that I have. In the following essay I will bring some reasons to illustrate my opinion.
first of all, change in general, is a favorable matter to do for me. Hence, I want to make change in everything of myself such as customs, friends, car, hobbies, etc. my personal experience is a compelling example of this matter. my brother started a new life in Australia last year and he was happy with his new style of being. As a result, I managed to make suggestions about his changes during the migration he'd done. Absolutely, he has influenced by the new society he was in and it made him feel stronger because he was compatible with unexperienced changes.
Secondly, as I mentioned before, the culture of any country varies from others by the system that they have on dressing. Therefore, everyone should follow the instructions of using customs after conceiving cultural points of the new country. For instance, one of my classmates who was from Spain started to mimic the way that I obtained on wearing. As a result, he was able to make friends as soon as possible due to the first judge that people made by his appearance.
To sum up, when it comes to making a decision about the way we appear out of the home, we must consider that group living has its issues and we have to follow the rules of every place. In my view, it's better to have new custome in a new city because of its effect on our social face and because of the influences that a change can have on our mental health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in general, such as, as a result, first of all, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48199445983 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53921296046 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554016620499 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7200976081 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1764705882 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.82352941176 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159278722816 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475431898645 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380390504349 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0920456239111 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445786990579 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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