TPO11- Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of advanced technology particularly the Internet on people's lives. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that the Internet has been providing numerous advantages for people. On the other extreme of the rope, others hold the opposite view, stating that its merits outweigh its demerits. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my viewpoints.
As the first and paramount reason, the Internet provides various useful information helping people develop their knowledge and expand their horizons. In other words, nowadays, with the advent of new and advanced based-Internet technology such as smartphones people can connect to the Internet and search about different topics easily. They can read different information, analyze them and try to obtain creative ideas. Consequently, they can find a viable solution and pragmatic and rational approaches to deal efficiently with their problems and unprecedented challenges effectively. For instance, research conducted by some scientists at a university shows that many students use numerous websites to complete their projects and assignments properly. High school students especially those who do not understand scientific problems use online encyclopedias and electronic librarians to complete their homework. In addition, they can watch several educational videos and read other’s comments on those websites and communicate with them to acquire their valuable experiences and new insights. Hence, the more the Internet people can access, the more useful information and knowledge they can gain and the more consistent improvement they will show in their performance in the near future.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that the Internet as an expeditious source of information can provide the best authentic news and up-to-date information for people. To be more specific, people can aware of the current and updated local and international news via the internet easily anywhere and anytime conveniently. Take my own experience as a compelling example. When I was a student at a university, I had to travel a long distance between Shiraz and Isfahan. Once a day, I could not access the Internet and get up-to-date news about climate conditions and know whether the weather is rainy or not. Unfortunately, in the middle of the road, the weather was snowy and foggy and I could not get to the dormitory. I had to stay in a small village for two days and spent a lot of money on repairing my car. In addition, I could not study well for my exam to pass it. Therefore, if I had accessed the Internet and gotten current climate news, neither would I fail my exam nor would I waste my money.
In conclusion, taking the above reasons into account, I strongly believe the Internet as an endless supply of knowledge has numerous constructive effects on people’s performance. Not only does it help people adopt new methods for coping with their problems, but it also provides informative news helping them become more updated.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2754.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27586206897 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96405225331 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551724137931 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 865.8 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1013781445 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.75 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95833333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227066384369 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596448271217 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496653797636 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140900342591 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405703900391 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 86.8835125448 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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